自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and natural with good detail, but you can improve by tightening sentences, fixing small grammar points, and using linking words for smoother flow. Specifically: (1) start with a concise topic sentence, (2) correct phrasing such as “after school” (not “after my school”), (3) avoid minor redundancy (e.g., “I rode it almost every day” and “I used to cycle” convey the same idea), and (4) add one brief reflective comment to show feeling or impact. Keep your response under five sentences.

範例: I did. I had a bike and rode it almost every day after school. I often cycled around the neighborhood with my friends, exploring parks and racing each other. As a result, those afternoons became my favorite part of the day because they felt free and exciting.

建議: Your answer gives a basic opinion but needs clearer grammar, more specific supporting details, and linking language. Improve by using correct collocations (“used to riding bicycles” or “used to bikes”), providing examples (e.g., commuting, leisure, sport), and adding a short reason or comparison. Aim for one strong topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting points connected with linking words.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances and children ride them for fun after school. Moreover, cycling is common because it’s cheap and convenient compared with cars in busy urban areas.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I rode it almost every day after my school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I rode it almost every day after school.

Remove the definite article before 'school' because English commonly omits the article after phrases like 'after school' when referring to the general time children spend there. This is an article/usage convention; correct by deleting 'my'. Suggestion: use 'after school' to mean the period following classes.

× I used to cycle around my neighborhood with my friends, exploring parks, racing each other, which made my afternoons as a favorite part of the day.

✓ I used to cycle around my neighborhood with my friends, exploring parks and racing each other, which made the afternoons my favorite part of the day.

The original has awkward phrasing 'which made my afternoons as a favorite part of the day' and incorrect connector use. Change 'exploring parks, racing each other' to 'exploring parks and racing each other' to join parallel activities (conjunction instead of comma splice). Replace 'made my afternoons as a favorite' with 'made the afternoons my favorite' to correct word order and remove unnecessary 'as'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I think bikes are popular in my country because small kids and all adults are used to bicycle.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because small kids and adults are used to bicycles.

Errors: 'all adults' is redundant; 'used to bicycle' is incorrect verb/pronoun and count form. Use 'adults' without 'all' for natural phrasing. 'Used to bicycles' should be 'used to bicycles' or better 'used to riding bicycles'. Two correct options: plural noun 'bicycles' after 'used to' meaning accustomed to them, or 'used to riding bicycles' using gerund. Here plural noun is chosen. This corrects incorrect pronoun/word usage and noun form.

× Cycling is a main habit.

✓ Cycling is a common habit.

'Main' is not the correct adjective to describe frequency or typicality. Use 'common' to indicate something widely practiced. Alternatively 'a popular habit' or 'a common activity' would be natural. This fixes word choice (adjective usage).