自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and avoid hesitations and small errors (e.g., said “bag” instead of “bike”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “two-wheeled” rather than “2 wheeled”).

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about five or six years old. It was a two-wheeled bike in black and red, and my father taught me how to ride it. I loved cycling around the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon.

建議: Give a direct opinion first and then support it with specific reasons and a brief comparison. Reduce fillers (umm, uh) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (however, because, although) to show contrast and cause. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: I don’t think bikes are very popular today. Although many people used bikes in the past, the growth of motorbikes and cars means that fewer people cycle now, especially in cities, because roads are crowded and distances are longer.

× Yes, umm, my parents bought me a bag when I was about, uh, five or six years old.

✓ Yes, umm, my parents bought me a bike when I was about, uh, five or six years old.

The original sentence uses 'bag' which is likely a word choice error, not a grammatical tense error. However, to fit context (talking about a bike), replace 'bag' with 'bike'. The past tense 'bought' and time expression 'when I was about five or six years old' are correct. Suggestion: Check noun choice to match context.

× I still remember my father trained me to ride a bike and I really enjoyed riding up, uh, around my neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I still remember my father training me to ride a bike, and I really enjoyed riding around my neighborhood with my friends.

When using 'remember' followed by an action that happened in the past, the verb after 'remember' should be in the -ing form (present participle) to indicate a memory of that action. 'my father trained me' is grammatically possible but here 'remember' + gerund is more natural: 'remember training me' or alternatively 'I still remember that my father trained me.' Also remove the unnecessary preposition 'up' before 'around'. Suggestion: Use 'remember' + -ing for recalling past experiences or 'remember that' + past simple for reporting facts.

× Umm, I think that in my country, umm, the bike was popular in the past and now, umm uh, with the umm, with the increasing popularity of uh, motorbike motorbikes and cars, people rarely ride on a bike.

✓ Umm, I think that in my country bikes were popular in the past, but now, with the increasing popularity of motorbikes and cars, people rarely ride bikes.

The sentence mixes singular/plural and article usage and has awkward phrasing. Use 'bikes were popular' for general plural subject in the past. 'the bike was popular' sounds unnatural for a general statement. Use 'motorbikes' (plural) and 'ride bikes' (no article) for habitual action. Also replace 'and now' with 'but now' to contrast past and present. Suggestion: For general statements about a group, use plural nouns without 'the' and match verb tense (were) for past statements.