自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Also correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., 'go' → 'went', 'landed for someone' → 'gave it to someone').

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. When I moved from my condo to a house, the bike disappeared, and I later learned my mother had given it to a neighbor. Although I miss it, I don’t ride very often now.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'ride a bike' not 'write a bike'), and include one specific reason or example with a linking word. Keep it within a few sentences and avoid filler words like 'like'.

範例: Definitely. Riding a bike is very popular in Thailand because many children learn to ride at a young age. For example, most of my friends and relatives could ride by the time they were seven, and bikes are commonly used for short trips in neighborhoods.

× Yes I used to have a bike when I was a child but when I moved out of my condo to live in a house I I'm not sure where the bike go gone but it's not here anymore.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child, but when I moved out of my condo to live in a house, I'm not sure where the bike went; it's not here anymore.

Errors: incorrect verb forms 'go gone' instead of the simple past 'went', and run-on sentence without proper punctuation. Rule: use the simple past for completed actions in the past (went). Suggestion: replace 'go gone' with 'went', add commas and a semicolon or period to separate clauses, and include contraction 'I'm' properly preceded by a comma if needed. Additionally, the clause 'to live in a house' is fine but can be set off with commas for clarity.

× Maybe my mom landed for someone like I'm not sure.

✓ Maybe my mom lent it to someone, but I'm not sure.

Errors: wrong verb 'landed' used instead of 'lent', missing object 'it' (the bike), and sentence structure lacks a conjunction to join the idea. Rule: use the correct past tense verb for lending (lent) and include the direct object. Suggestion: replace 'landed for someone' with 'lent it to someone' and add 'but' to connect uncertainty: 'Maybe my mom lent it to someone, but I'm not sure.'

× Definitely. I think like every child has learned to write a bike when they were when they were young, like me included.

✓ Definitely. I think almost every child learns to ride a bike when they are young, including me.

Errors: incorrect verb 'has learned' with timing mismatch and wrong word 'write' instead of 'ride'. Also inconsistent tense/person: use present simple 'learns' for general truths and 'they are' for plural generic pronoun. Rule: for general facts use present simple (learns) and correct lexical choice 'ride'. Suggestion: use 'almost every child learns to ride a bike when they are young, including me.'

× Like most of my friends and people I met in life, they all know how to ride a bike.

✓ Like most of my friends and people I have met in my life, they all know how to ride a bike.

Errors: tense mismatch 'met' should be present perfect 'have met' when referring to life experience up to now; missing 'my' before 'life' for clarity. Rule: use present perfect for experiences that extend to the present. Suggestion: say 'people I have met in my life'.

× So yeah, I do think it is popular in Thailand.

✓ So yeah, I do think bicycles are popular in Thailand.

Errors: pronoun 'it' is vague; better to use 'bicycles' or 'bike riding' to match the question about bikes. Rule: maintain clear reference and noun agreement. Suggestion: replace 'it' with 'bicycles' to be specific: 'bicycles are popular in Thailand.'