自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense (past), avoid fillers and repetition, and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “cycle” not “cycling” as a noun/verb correctly).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it almost every weekend with my family, especially my father, who was very enthusiastic about cycling. Because we lived near a park, we often went on short rides together, which helped me become confident on two wheels.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar (present simple), fewer hesitations, and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “bike lanes”, “promote cycling”, “benefits”). Avoid repeating words and be specific about who benefits and how.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in Malaysia. Firstly, the government has built many dedicated bike lanes in cities, which makes cycling safer for commuters. Secondly, cycling is promoted as a healthy and affordable way to travel, so more people now choose bikes for short trips.

× Yeah, I do have, uh, I means in a moment that I will, I, I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did have one when I was a child.

The student mixes present and past tenses. The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so use past tense 'did have' or simply 'had.' Also 'I means in a moment that I will' is incorrect and irrelevant; it should be omitted. Use a clear past-tense sentence: 'Yes, I did have one when I was a child.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the time reference (past), avoid filler fragments, and use 'had' or 'did have' for emphasis.

× I love to, I love to cycling and I always cycling with my families, especially my father who always enthusiasm, uh, on the cycling,

✓ I loved cycling and I always cycled with my family, especially my father, who was always enthusiastic about cycling.

The student incorrectly combines 'love to' with the -ing form and uses wrong tense and noun forms. For past habits, use past tense 'loved' and past simple 'cycled.' 'Cycling' as a gerund is fine after 'love', but here the time frame is past. 'Families' should be singular 'family.' 'Enthusiasm' is a noun; the adjective 'enthusiastic' with the preposition 'about' is required. Suggestion: Match verb forms to the time frame (use past tense for past habits), use 'family' for the household, and use 'enthusiastic about' to describe feelings.

× especially my father who always enthusiasm, uh, on the cycling, Yeah, and my father also.

✓ Especially my father, who was always enthusiastic about cycling.

The phrase 'who always enthusiasm' uses a noun 'enthusiasm' where a verb or adjective is needed. For third-person singular description use 'was' plus adjective 'enthusiastic' and the preposition 'about' before 'cycling.' Remove the redundant 'and my father also.' Suggestion: Use appropriate adjective forms ('enthusiastic') and correct verb 'was' for past description of third-person singular.

× For me, I would say yeah, living in Malaysia that the government have have try our best to construction the lane of of just the private to bicycle yeah and it provide a lot of beneficial that that that leading people.

✓ For me, I would say yes. In Malaysia, the government has tried its best to construct bicycle lanes, and this provides many benefits to people.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'have have try' should be 'has tried' (present perfect for recent government actions). 'Construction the lane of of just the private to bicycle' is a word-order and word-choice error; use 'construct bicycle lanes.' 'It provide' should be 'this provides' to match singular subject and present tense. Use 'many benefits' instead of 'a lot of beneficial.' Also 'leading people' is unclear; 'benefits to people' is correct. Suggestion: Use present perfect 'has tried' for actions with present relevance, correct noun phrases ('bicycle lanes'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('this provides'), and use 'benefits to people' for clarity.