自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tự nhiên hơn. Hiện tại câu trả lời có mâu thuẫn nhỏ (nói có xe nhưng lại không bao giờ dùng) và chứa lỗi ngữ pháp/phiên âm. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể. Chú ý dùng thì phù hợp (used to + động từ), sử dụng nối từ để mạch lạc (for example, because, so), và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “I never touched it” hoặc “I hardly ever rode it”). Hạn chế độ dài tối đa 5 câu.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, but I was too afraid to ride it, so I hardly ever used it. For example, I preferred walking to school while my friends cycled. As a result, the bike was mostly kept in the garage.

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần sửa lỗi phát âm/chữ sai (“Wise” → “bikes”) và ngữ pháp (mixing tenses, gerund usage). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề mạnh, dùng từ vựng phù hợp, thêm ví dụ cụ thể và nối từ để mạch lạc (for example, especially, in particular). Tránh lặp từ và rút gọn câu dài không cần thiết. Giữ trong 2–4 câu với các chi tiết cụ thể (ai, nơi, khi nào).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, I often see many people cycling on the streets, especially children and elderly people. In big cities, cycling is common for short trips and commuting because it’s cheap and convenient. Overall, biking remains a popular and practical mode of transport.

× My parents bought it for me and I'm too afraid to ride a bike so I never touch it.

✓ My parents bought it for me and I was too afraid to ride a bike so I never touched it.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context is past (childhood), so verbs should be past: 'am' -> 'was' and 'never touch' -> 'never touched'. Use past tense consistently when describing past habits or states. Suggestion: maintain past tense for all verbs when talking about past events.

× Yes, absolutely Wise are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Bikes are popular in my country.

'Wise' is a typo or incorrect word choice instead of 'bikes'. Also sentence needs punctuation. Replace with correct noun 'bikes' and add a period. Suggestion: proofread for typos and ensure the pronoun/noun matches intended meaning.

× Whenever I go down and walking down the street I often see a lot of people riding bikes, especially children and the old people.

✓ Whenever I go walking down the street I often see a lot of people riding bikes, especially children and older people.

The original uses 'go down and walking' which is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'go walking' or 'walk down'. Also 'the old people' is unnatural; use 'older people' or 'the elderly'. Suggestion: choose one verb structure (go walking or walk) and use natural adjective form for age groups.