自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy, sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense forms, avoid repetition, and add one brief supporting detail. Use linking words if adding detail. For example, say who bought it, what it looked like or a short memory, and end the response. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought me a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I remember riding it in our neighborhood every afternoon.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer comparative language, add a specific reason or example, and connect ideas with linking words. Begin with a direct statement about popularity, then briefly explain why and give an example. Limit to 1–3 concise sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: Bikes used to be popular in my country, but they are less common now because more people can afford cars. For example, in my town most families own a car, so fewer people ride bicycles for daily travel.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense; use 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: Use past simple for possessions in the past: 'I had a bike.'

× When I were a child, I remember that my father bought a bike and.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that my father bought a bike.

'Were' is incorrect for the singular first-person subject in the past simple; the correct form is 'was.' Also the sentence ended with 'and' leaving it unfinished; remove trailing 'and.' Note that mixing 'When I was a child' (past time clause) with 'I remember that' (present) is acceptable to express a current memory of a past event, but you could also say 'I remember when I was a child that my father bought a bike' or 'I remember my father buying a bike when I was a child.' Suggestion: Use 'was' with singular subjects in past simple and avoid hanging conjunctions.

× I was very young.

✓ I was very young then.

The sentence is grammatically correct but is short and slightly disjointed from the previous clause. Adding 'then' clarifies the time reference and improves cohesion. Alternatively, combine with the previous sentence: 'When I was a child, I remember that my father bought a bike because I was very young.' Suggestion: Connect short sentences to provide clearer context.

× It's used to be popular in the past, but now a few people ride bicycle.

✓ It used to be popular in the past, but now few people ride bicycles.

'It's used to be' mixes a contraction and incorrect verb form. The correct idiom is 'used to' for past habitual states: 'It used to be...' Also 'a few people' vs 'few people' changes meaning; 'few' emphasizes scarcity which fits 'but now few people ride bicycles.' 'Ride bicycle' needs plural noun 'bicycles' or the gerund 'ride a bicycle.' Suggestion: Use 'used to' for past habits: 'It used to be popular in the past, but now few people ride bicycles.'

× They, uh, drive the car.

✓ They drive cars now.

'The car' implies a specific car; in general statements use plural 'cars' or 'a car' with singular subject. Also include 'now' to contrast with past. Remove filler 'uh' in formal answer. Suggestion: Use general plural nouns for general habits: 'They drive cars now.'