自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer directly address the past-tense question, keep sentences concise, avoid repetition and filler words, and finish the thought. Start with a clear topic sentence about having a bike as a child, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use past tense when referring to childhood and avoid hesitations like "you know".

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to visit friends and practise tricks in the park, which helped me stay active and confident. However, now that I am in 12th grade I rarely ride it because I have less free time, though I sometimes cycle for a short break and listen to music to relax.

建議: Give a clear direct answer (yes/no) and support it with specific reasons and examples. Reduce fillers and vague phrases, and use linking words like "because", "for example" or "also" to organise ideas. Mention who uses bikes and for what purposes to make the response more informative and concrete.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in small towns and cities. Many people use bicycles for daily commuting because they are cheap and help avoid traffic. For example, students and shopkeepers often cycle short distances instead of taking buses, and some cities have bike lanes that make cycling safer and more convenient.

× Yeah, I am still a child and I do have a bike right now.

✓ Yeah, I was a child and I did have a bike back then.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense ('am', 'do have', 'right now') conflicts with the time reference. Use past simple ('was', 'did have') to match the question's past timeframe. Suggestion: pay attention to time markers in the question and switch verb tense accordingly.

× I rarely ride it 'cause I I'm in 12th grade right now and don't have a lot of time for it, but I still find, you know, a few minutes here and there to cycle and listen to music at the same time.

✓ I rarely rode it because I was in 12th grade then and didn't have a lot of time for it, but I still found a few minutes here and there to cycle and listen to music at the same time.

The sentence mixes present tense with the past reference established by 'when you were a child.' Verbs should be in past simple ('rarely rode', 'was', 'didn't have', 'found') to be consistent. Also remove filler repetitions ('you know') and fix contractions appropriately. Suggestion: keep all verbs in the same past timeframe when describing past habits.

× It is it just helps me keep keep calm and just.

✓ It just helped me stay calm.

The original has repeated words ('it is it', 'keep keep') and an unfinished clause ('and just'). This is a sentence structure and repetition problem. Recast succinctly in past tense to match the context: 'It just helped me stay calm.' Suggestion: eliminate repetitions and finish thoughts; choose a simple verb ('helped') and an appropriate complement ('stay calm').

× Yeah, especially where I from, where I come from, it is really popular.

✓ Yeah, especially where I'm from, it is really popular.

The phrase 'where I from' omits the necessary auxiliary verb or contraction. Use 'where I'm from' (where I am from) to be grammatically correct. Also, because the examiner asked about general popularity, present simple 'is' is appropriate here. Suggestion: include the correct form of the verb 'to be' in relative clauses ('where I'm from').

× It's not only seen as a means of exercise, rather, you know, people use it regularly to get around from here to here.

✓ It's not only seen as a means of exercise; people also use it regularly to get around.

The phrase 'from here to here' is vague and unnecessary; using 'also' clarifies the contrast ('not only... also'). The original uses 'rather' awkwardly and has filler 'you know.' Replace with a clear conjunction and concise phrasing. Suggestion: use 'not only... but also' or 'not only...; people also...' and avoid vague placeholders.

× I know it's really easy and you don't have to go through traffic and all that, too.

✓ I know it's really convenient because you don't have to deal with traffic.

The phrase 'go through traffic' is understandable but less natural than 'deal with traffic' or 'get stuck in traffic.' 'And all that, too' is informal filler; replace with a concise reason ('because'). Suggestion: use cleaner, more standard expressions in answers and avoid informal fillers for clarity.