自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid fillers (e.g., "uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "however") correctly and keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes — I had a purple Barbie bike when I was a child. However, I never learned to ride it properly because I was too afraid to take off the training wheels. As a result, I rarely rode it beyond my driveway and missed out on learning to cycle well.

建議: Remove hesitation markers and combine related ideas to improve coherence. Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific supporting points linked by connectors like "for example" or "also". Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "delivery couriers", "recreational cycling").

範例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. For example, many children enjoy recreational cycling in parks, and delivery couriers often use bicycles in towns because they are faster in congested areas. This makes cycling both a leisure activity and a practical mode of transport.

× When I was a child, I used to have a purple Barbie bike, which I didn't learn how to ride properly because I was really afraid to, uh, ride a bike without the training wheels.

✓ When I was a child, I used to have a purple Barbie bike, which I never learned to ride properly because I was really afraid to ride a bike without the training wheels.

The original sentence mixes 'didn't learn how to' with the context of a habitual past inability; 'never learned to ride' is more natural and concise. Also omit the filler 'to,' after 'afraid' before the verb phrase. Use the infinitive 'to ride' after 'learned' or use 'learned how to ride'; here 'learned to ride' is more idiomatic. Remove filler words like 'uh' for clarity.

× I think uh, bikes are fairly popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are fairly popular in my country.

The sentence contains filler 'uh' which is not a grammatical preposition error but should be removed for fluency. No preposition is needed; removing hesitations improves grammatical clarity.

× Uh, whenever I go out, uh, especially in the park, I always see children cycling and having fun with friends while cycling.

✓ Whenever I go out, especially to the park, I always see children cycling and having fun with friends.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundant repetition 'while cycling' which is unnecessary after 'children cycling'. Use the preposition 'to' with 'park' to indicate direction/purpose: 'go out, especially to the park'. This makes the present simple habitual observation clear and concise.

× And uh, also many delivery services uh in my town are used with bikes rather than cars.

✓ Also, many delivery services in my town use bikes rather than cars.

The original passive-like phrasing 'are used with bikes' is awkward. Use active voice: 'delivery services use bikes'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'and' at the start. This corrects preposition misuse and improves subject-verb clarity.