自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and provides good specific details (fear after seeing an accident, parents not encouraging, spending time at the library). To improve, make the response more concise and remove repetitions (e.g., "and I was. I was also"). Start with a direct topic sentence, then use one or two supporting details with a linking word (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Keep the answer under five sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (use 'reluctant' or 'cautious' instead of repeating 'afraid').

範例: No, I didn't. I was quite cautious as a child because I once saw a neighbor hurt himself while riding, so my parents discouraged me from cycling. As a result, I preferred reading and spent most weekends at the library or playing board games with friends.

建議: This answer is too brief and contains hesitation. To improve, give a clear topic sentence and then add one or two specific supporting details or examples (regional use, reasons for popularity, who uses them). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid filler words such as 'umm'. Aim for two to three sentences total.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many students and commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× I wasn't very adventurous and preferred reading and playing indoors, and I was.

✓ I wasn't very adventurous and preferred reading and playing indoors.

The sentence contains a redundant fragment 'and I was' that creates an incomplete clause and breaks sentence structure. Remove the fragment to make a clear, grammatical sentence. Suggestion: avoid leaving unfinished clauses; if you intend to add information, complete the clause (for example, 'and I was shy').

× I was also afraid of falling because I once saw a boy in my neighborhood hurt himself while riding, so my parents never encouraged it.

✓ I was also afraid of falling because I once saw a boy in my neighborhood hurt himself while riding, so my parents never encouraged me to ride.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear and causes a sentence structure problem; the intended object is the action of riding a bike. Change 'it' to 'me to ride' to maintain correct past-tense construction and clarity. Use verb phrase 'encouraged me to ride' to show who received encouragement and what action was referenced.

× They are very very popular in my country. Umm.

✓ They are very, very popular in my country.

Using 'Umm' and an extra standalone filler is informal and not necessary in a concise answer. Also, write 'very, very' with a comma for natural spoken emphasis in text. Remove the filler 'Umm' for a cleaner response.