自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did), then add two brief supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Correct vocabulary and word forms (e.g., 'delighted', 'grateful', 'around the fields' not 'under the boundaries') and avoid filler words like 'OK'. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a small red bike with a basket when I was five, and I used to ride it around the fields of our big farm. I still remember feeling delighted and grateful because it gave me freedom to explore.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer reasons with linking words. Begin with a clear statement (No, they are not very popular), then give 1–2 specific reasons using connectors like 'because' or 'mainly due to'. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'use cars for transportation', 'mainly because of the hot weather'). Avoid repeating phrases.

範例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. People mainly use cars for transportation because distances are long and, more importantly, the hot climate makes cycling uncomfortable for much of the year.

× My father bought me a bike when I was five years old.

✓ My father bought me a bike when I was five years old.

No change needed; sentence is correct. Past simple 'bought' is appropriate for a completed action in the past.

× It was a red with a basket, OK,

✓ It was a red bike with a basket.

The article and noun usage is incorrect. 'a red' alone needs a noun after it (red bike). Include the noun 'bike' to complete the noun phrase and place the article 'a' before the full phrase. Keep punctuation simple: remove 'OK' in formal speech.

× And I used to ride it under the boundaries in our big farm.

✓ And I used to ride it around the boundaries of our big farm.

Preposition and noun choice are incorrect. People 'ride around' an area and boundaries are referred to 'boundaries of' a place. Use 'around the boundaries of our big farm' to express riding along the edges. 'In our big farm' should be 'on our big farm' or 'at our farm'; here 'around the boundaries of' is most natural.

× I was very delight and grateful.

✓ I was very delighted and grateful.

'Delight' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'delighted'. Use 'delighted' to describe a feeling. 'Very delighted' is acceptable, and 'grateful' is a parallel adjective so use 'and' between them.

× Actually it's not because the people here use cars as a transportation and that's they choose cars because of many reasons such as the weather.

✓ Actually it is not; people here use cars for transportation, and they choose cars for many reasons, such as the weather.

Sentence structure and phrasing are awkward and contain unnecessary words. Replace 'it's not' with 'it is not' and specify what 'not' refers to (bicycles being popular). Use 'for transportation' not 'as a transportation'. Remove 'that's' and use 'they choose cars for many reasons' for clarity. Add commas to separate clauses.

× As you know it's we have a hot weather here so they can't go for the bicycle.

✓ As you know, we have hot weather here, so they don't ride bicycles.

Word order and tense are incorrect. 'It's we have a hot weather' is ungrammatical; use 'we have hot weather here'. 'Can't go for the bicycle' is awkward—use 'don't ride bicycles' or 'won't ride bicycles' depending on meaning. Present simple 'don't ride' fits general truth. Also remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'bicycle' when speaking generally.