自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be accurate with tense and word choice, make your answer concise and natural, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. For example, correct tense ('did' -> past), replace awkward words ('absorbed') and remove unnecessary hesitation. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I had a simple pedal cycle that I used to ride to my friend’s house every weekend.

建議: Give a direct opinion then support it with a specific reason or example using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'however'). Avoid fillers and repeat words; use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'motorbikes' or 'bicycles'). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting. However, modern motorcycles and imported models are often expensive, so budget models remain more common.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was absorbed, but uh, instead of bike I was having a cycle.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child; instead of a bike I had a cycle.

The student mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was...' and uses incorrect word 'absorbed' for 'a child'. Use past tense for a past-time question: 'didn't have' and simple past 'had'. Also use the noun 'child' and include the article 'a' before 'bike' and 'cycle' for correctness. Suggested improvement: Keep past reference consistent by using simple past verbs ('didn't have', 'had') and use correct vocabulary ('child').

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, but uh, bikes are also very expensive.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, but they are also quite expensive.

Repeating 'bikes' is awkward; replace the second noun with the pronoun 'they' and use an appropriate adverb 'quite' for natural emphasis. This fixes article/word choice redundancy and improves cohesion. Suggested improvement: Use pronouns to avoid repetition and choose natural modifiers ('quite expensive').