自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 시제 사용이 불명확합니다. 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤, 추가 설명은 연결어를 사용해 명확하게 이어주세요. 예를 들어 나이, 자전거의 특징(색상, 크기), 그리고 그 자전거를 좋아했던 이유나 기억을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 한 문장은 1~2개의 핵심 정보를 담도록 하세요.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. Because it was sturdy and easy to control, I felt confident learning to ride without help. As a result, I spent most afternoons practicing with my friends.

建議: 의견을 더 명확하게 표현하고 문장을 조직화하세요. 먼저 직접적인 답변을 한 문장으로 주고, 이어서 이유와 구체적 예시(연령대, 통계적 관찰, 도시 vs 시골 차이 등)를 연결어(For example, In addition, Therefore 등)로 덧붙이세요. 불완전한 문장과 모호한 표현을 피하세요.

範例: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in Korea. In recent years, many people of all ages enjoy biking for exercise and commuting. For example, in cities there are dedicated bike lanes and rental systems, which make cycling convenient. Therefore, cycling has become a common hobby and a practical way to travel.

× Yeah, I had I had a bike levels seven years old and I thought I like that and previous.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was seven years old and I liked it.

The original sentence has repeated words, wrong word order and tense problems. 'I had I had' is repetition; 'levels seven years old' is incorrect word order and form; 'I thought I like that and previous' mixes present and past tenses and uses wrong words. Use a clear past-time clause 'when I was seven years old' and keep the past tense 'liked' to match 'had'. Keep sentence concise. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, place the age clause after 'when', and use past tense for feelings about a past possession.

× What's the thing in Korea I can still popular hobby to anyone no I.

✓ In Korea, cycling is still a popular hobby for many people.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and nonstandard fragments. 'What's the thing in Korea' and 'I can still popular hobby to anyone no I' are ungrammatical. Use a simple subject-verb structure 'cycling is still a popular hobby' and clarify the target group with 'for many people'. Suggestion: Start with location 'In Korea,' use a noun ('cycling') as subject, and follow with 'is' + adjective 'popular' and a correct prepositional phrase ('for many people').

× And not depending on age.

✓ It does not depend on age.

Fragment lacks a clear subject and auxiliary verb. Use 'it' as a pronoun referring to cycling and include the negative auxiliary 'does not' for present simple negation. Suggestion: Use a subject pronoun and correct verb form 'does not depend' to form a complete sentence.

× So yeah, I think last time people.

✓ So yeah, I think people used to ride bikes more in the past.

The fragment 'I think last time people' is incomplete and unclear. To express an opinion about the past, use 'used to' or a past tense clause: 'people used to ride bikes more in the past.' Suggestion: Complete the thought by specifying what people did in the past and use 'used to' for habitual past actions.