自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (use past tense consistently), and complete the final idea. Add one specific supporting detail and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I often rode it in the park in the evenings. Because I was small, my older brother usually stood nearby to keep me safe, so I felt confident practising new tricks.

建議: Give a clearer topic sentence, avoid repeating fillers, improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "affordable" instead of "less cost"), and add a specific example or brief reason using a linking word to make the answer coherent.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are affordable for many families, and secondly they are practical for short trips in crowded cities. For example, students often cycle to school because it saves money and keeps them active.

× I used to ride it in the evening in the park and uh, whenever I ride, my Big Brother stands nearby so that I didn't.

✓ I used to ride it in the evening in the park, and whenever I rode, my big brother stood nearby so that I wouldn't fall.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with present tense verbs 'ride' and 'stands' and an incorrect ending 'so that I didn't.' Maintain past tense for past habitual actions: change 'ride' to 'rode' and 'stands' to 'stood'. Also correct the clause 'so that I didn't' to 'so that I wouldn't fall' to express purpose and prevention. Use consistent verb tense and clearer purpose clause. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in the past when describing past routines and use 'wouldn't fall' or 'wouldn't get hurt' for prevention.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people are not rich here.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people are not rich here.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable regarding singular/plural; 'bikes' and 'people' are correctly plural. No change needed. (Included to confirm no singular/plural error.)

× Yes, I had a bicycle when I was, uh, at young age.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was young.

The phrase 'at young age' is ungrammatical. Use the adjective 'young' without 'at' and without the noun 'age', or say 'at a young age'. The correct simple form 'when I was young' is more natural. If using 'age', say 'at a young age.' Suggestion: Use 'when I was young' or 'when I was a child' for natural phrasing.

× So a bicycle is very easy to buy, it is less cost so and it also help in health develop.

✓ A bicycle is very easy to buy because it costs less, and it also helps with health development.

Multiple errors: 'less cost' is incorrect; use 'costs less' or 'is less expensive'. 'Help in health develop' misuses prepositions and verb forms: use 'helps with' and a noun phrase 'health development' or 'improving health'. Also split run-on sentence with a conjunction. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it also helps'. Suggestion: Say 'A bicycle is very easy to buy because it costs less, and it also helps improve health.'