自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cümle yapılarını ve zaman uyumunu düzeltmelisiniz. Şu anda karışık ve tekrarlı ifadeler var (“have” yerine “had”, “am” yerine “was” gibi). Ayrıca tek bir ana cümle kurup ardından kısa bir detay ekleyin; gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın. Örnek olarak geçmiş zamanı tutarlı kullanın ve bir bağlaçla nedeni veya anıyı ekleyin.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it to school every day, which helped me become more independent.

建議: Görüşünüzü net ifadelerle ve doğru dil bilgisiyle belirtmelisiniz. "Can be" yerine net bir görüş (örneğin "are") kullanın, nedeninizi destekleyecek spesifik örnekler ekleyin ve bağlaçları doğru kullanın ("because" yerine "cause"). Cümleleri daha doğal hale getirmek için çoğul ve artikelleri düzeltin.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many children own one or two bikes, and families often use them for short trips and exercise.

× Of course I have one bicycle when I am a child.

✓ Of course I had a bicycle when I was a child.

The sentence talks about a past situation, so present simple (have, am) is incorrect. Use past simple (had, was) to match the time reference 'when I was a child.' Also 'one bicycle' is unnatural; simply 'a bicycle' is preferred. Suggestion: Use past simple for past events and use 'a bicycle' instead of 'one bicycle.'

× My parents gave it to me when I am a little child.

✓ My parents gave it to me when I was a little child.

The clause 'when I am a little child' refers to a past time and therefore requires past tense 'was' rather than present 'am.' Keep the main verb 'gave' in past simple. Suggestion: Maintain past tense in both clauses describing past events.

× I think it can be popular cause of every child has one bicycle or two.

✓ I think bikes are popular because every child has one or two.

Multiple issues: 'can be popular' is unnecessary modal here—use present simple 'are popular' when stating a general fact. 'Cause of' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'because' or 'due to.' 'Every child has one bicycle or two' has word order and article issues; better: 'every child has one or two.' Suggestion: Use simple present for general statements, use 'because' to indicate reason, and simplify the quantity phrase.