自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct collocations (ride a bike, not ride a bicycle demo), and add one specific detail. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if you add details.

範例: Yes, I did — I loved riding my bike as a child. I had a popular model called the Nice 7X, which was light and easy to handle, so I rode it almost every day after school. Because of that, I became quite confident cycling on busy streets.

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence: begin with a direct answer, use correct expressions (popular, concern about health), and link ideas with words like 'however' or 'in recent years'. Give a specific example or brief reason to support your view.

範例: Not really at first — cycling was not very popular when I was young. However, in recent years people have started cycling more because of growing health awareness and better bike lanes in cities, so many more families now use bikes for exercise and short trips.

× Yes, I really enjoy riding the bicycle.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed riding a bicycle.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past reference). The verb enjoy should be in past tense to match the time frame: 'enjoy' -> 'enjoyed'. Also use the indefinite article 'a' before 'bicycle' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use past simple for actions/habits in the past and 'a bicycle' for a nonspecific single bike.'

× When I was young, I used to ride a bicycle demo where uh, which the model is uh, nice 7X and it is very famous when I was young.

✓ When I was young, I used to ride a bicycle model called Nice 7X, which was very famous then.

Original sentence is wordy and has redundant phrases and article issues. Use 'used to' + base verb 'ride' for past habitual action (correct). Remove filler 'demo' and 'uh' and restructure: 'a bicycle model called Nice 7X' uses correct noun phrase order and article. 'Which was very famous then' keeps past tense consistency. Suggestion: simplify clauses, avoid repetition of 'when I was young', and place modifiers next to the nouns they describe.'

× Actually when I was young, riding the bicycle was not famous in my country.

✓ Actually, when I was young, riding bicycles was not popular in my country.

'Famous' is not appropriate for an activity; 'popular' is the correct adjective. Use plural 'riding bicycles' or the gerund phrase 'riding bicycles' to speak generally. Keep past tense 'was' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives ('popular') and match number when speaking generally.'

× But since the health issue is concerned in my country, so I think few years ago it has been improving and people in my country are riding the bicycle.

✓ But because people became more concerned about health in my country a few years ago, I think things have improved and more people are now riding bicycles.

Multiple issues: 'since the health issue is concerned' is awkward; use 'because people became more concerned about health' or 'because of growing health concerns.' The phrase 'so I think few years ago it has been improving' mixes time references incorrectly. Use 'a few years ago' as a past time marker and 'things have improved' (present perfect) to describe change up to now. Use 'more people are now riding bicycles' for current trend and plural 'bicycles' for general activity. Suggestion: keep time expressions consistent, choose clear cause phrases, and use plural nouns for general actions.'