自行车— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, except that it's those that have four wheels. Like it's especially specifically made for children who are still learning how to bike. So there's 2 two more wheels on the side to help to help me balance better.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Absolutely not. Bikes are not popular in my country because in Hong Kong it's a bustling city and it's actually very accessible too, so we kind of just walk or use public transport to go to places.
評估
總分
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分數: 72.0建議: Shorten and clarify your response. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “two more wheels,” “to help to help,” “especially specifically”). Also correct small grammar issues (use singular/plural and simpler phrases).
範例: Yes, I did. It was a children’s bike with training wheels. Because I was still learning to ride, the extra wheels helped me keep my balance and feel more confident.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分數: 78.0建議: Give a direct answer, then support it with two concise, specific reasons linked clearly. Avoid casual filler phrases like “kind of” and overuse of qualifiers (e.g., “actually”). Mention a brief example or consequence to strengthen your point.
範例: Not really. In Hong Kong, streets are crowded and public transport is very convenient, so most people prefer to walk or take the MTR. For example, it’s usually faster to take the train than to cycle during rush hour.
文法
× So there's 2 two more wheels on the side to help to help me balance better.
✓ So there are two extra wheels on the sides to help me balance better.
The original sentence has several issues: 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is singular and does not agree with the plural noun 'two more wheels' (subject-verb agreement -> use 'there are'). The numeral is duplicated ('2 two') and should be written once; 'more' is unnecessary when saying 'two extra wheels'; 'on the side' is better as 'on the sides' since there are wheels on both sides. Also remove the duplicated phrase 'to help'. Suggestion: use 'there are' for plural subjects, remove duplicated words, and keep concise phrasing.'},{
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