自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the bike, correct any wrong word choices, and give one or two concise supporting details with proper tense and linking words. Avoid filler words like “then, yeah.”

範例: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, and I often rode with friends to the nearby park. Because I rode so often, I became quite confident cycling on busy streets.

建議: Make the answer direct and logical. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons or examples linked with simple connectors (for example, because, and, also). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., commuters, students) and correct grammar.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many commuters use bikes to travel short distances to work because it is cheap and avoids traffic, and many students ride to school every day. Additionally, bike-sharing schemes in cities have made cycling more convenient for people without their own bikes.

× Yes, I had a Vietnam when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle from Vietnam when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'a Vietnam' which incorrectly treats the country name as a noun for an object. This is an incorrect use of a noun/adjective; 'Vietnamese' can be an adjective or you can say 'a bicycle from Vietnam.' Use 'a bicycle' (the correct object) and add 'from Vietnam' or 'a Vietnamese bicycle' to describe origin. Suggestion: say 'a bicycle' or 'a Vietnamese bicycle.'

× I used to ride it around a lot of recently then, yeah.

✓ I used to ride it around a lot back then.

The phrase 'used to' already indicates a past habit and should be followed by the base verb ('ride'), not by adding 'recently then.' 'Recently' conflicts with 'used to' which refers to the past; 'back then' or 'when I was a child' is appropriate. Also remove 'then' after 'recently' and avoid mixing time references. Suggestion: use 'I used to ride it around a lot back then.'

× Yes I do think bikes are popular in my country which is the experiences cause everywhere and some people ride them by earners or in school.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because they are common everywhere and some people ride them to work or to school.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Which is the experiences cause everywhere' is incorrect structure and word choice. Use 'because' to introduce a reason. 'They are common everywhere' is a clear phrase. 'Ride them by earners' is incorrect; likely intended 'to work' (people who earn money commute by bike) so use 'to work or to school.' Reorganize the clause order for clarity: 'I do think... because... and...'. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and use correct prepositions 'to work' and 'to school.'