自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and conciseness. Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In fact, I learned to ride it at about six years old, and I used it every day to visit my friends in the neighborhood. Because I practiced regularly, I became quite confident and could ride long distances without help.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure. Use accurate words (e.g., “accessible” instead of “assess”) and connect reasons with linking words. Provide one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid fragmented sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to use. For example, many people ride bikes to work or school since they reduce travel time in congested areas and are cheaper than motor vehicles.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with the past time marker 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent with time expressions (use past for past time frames).

× Uh, I also have a cycle which I used to drive since my childhood.

✓ Uh, I also had a bicycle which I used to ride since my childhood.

Again, 'have' is present while 'since my childhood' refers to a past period; use past 'had'. Also 'cycle' is more naturally 'bicycle' and 'drive' is incorrect for bicycles — use 'ride'. Maintain tense consistency and use correct verb for the activity. If the action continued to present, use 'have had' or 'have been riding' appropriately.

× Yes, from my standpoint, bikes are very popular in my country because they are very convenient and easy to assess, so they make people.

✓ Yes, from my standpoint, bikes are very popular in my country because they are very convenient and easy to access, so they make commuting easier and shorter.

The phrase 'easy to assess' is incorrect; the intended word is 'access' (able to be reached). 'Make people.' is incomplete and likely intended 'make commuting easier and shorter.' 'Commutation' is the wrong noun; use 'commuting'. Also 'short' should be 'shorter' for comparison with 'easier'. Suggestion: choose correct word forms and complete the clause to convey the intended meaning.

× ...which I used to drive since my childhood.

✓ ...which I used to ride since my childhood.

Besides verb choice 'ride' instead of 'drive', 'used to' with 'since' is awkward: 'used to' implies a habitual past action without continuation, while 'since' suggests continuation. If the action continued, use 'have been riding since my childhood'; if it was only in the past, use 'used to ride in my childhood.' Ensure prepositions and aspect match the intended meaning.