自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is direct and natural but very short and repetitive. To improve, give a brief topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who gave it to you, where you rode it, a short memory). Use one linking word to connect ideas and avoid filler sounds like “umm” or “uh.” Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a small red bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me on my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon. It helped me gain confidence and learn to balance quickly, and I still remember racing my friends down the street.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is disfluent and repetitive, with hesitations and unclear phrasing (e.g., “learn to drive” for bikes). To improve, start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons or examples (use linking words like “because” or “for example”), and correct word choices (“ride” instead of “drive,” “children” or “youngsters”). Reduce repetitions and hesitations.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many families buy them for children as a first means of transport and exercise. For example, parents often teach kids to ride in parks or quiet streets so they can develop balance and independence. As a result, you still see many people using bicycles for short trips and leisure.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did' with the main verb in affirmative past simple is unnecessary and nonstandard. In past simple affirmative, use the past form 'had' rather than 'did have'. Suggestion: remove 'did' and say 'I had a bike'.

× Yes, definitely as a child umm uh, we, we do provide bikes to the kids so that they can learn to drive they can learn to uh, so sorry, they can learn to understand how to balance the bikes.

✓ Yes, definitely; when I was a child we were given bikes so that we could learn to ride and to understand how to balance them.

The student mixes present simple ('we do provide') with past context ('as a child') and uses 'drive' incorrectly for bicycles. Use past passive or past simple to match past context ('were given' or 'we had') and 'ride' for bicycles. Also replace 'balance the bikes' with 'balance them' for natural reference. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent with 'when I was a child' and use 'ride' instead of 'drive'.

× So yes, we do give uh bikes to the kids youngsters and yes.

✓ So yes, we gave bikes to children when they were young.

The phrase 'kids youngsters' is redundant and awkward; choose one noun. Also the original uses present 'do give' but context is past. Use past 'gave' and a clear noun 'children' and a temporal phrase 'when they were young'. Suggestion: avoid redundant words and match tense to context.