自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar errors, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct verb forms (e.g., “learn to ride”), remove duplicated words, and use a linking word to add a detail about when or why your mother encouraged you.

範例: Yes – I had a black-and-green bike when I was a child. My mother bought it so I could learn to ride safely, and I practiced on weekends in the park. Because she believed cycling was important for my health, I spent several hours each week riding with friends.

建議: Make your answer more natural and coherent. Begin with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because” and “for example”). Correct grammar (e.g., “bike riders” and smoother phrase choices like “heavy traffic” rather than “being proud”). Add a brief consequence or example to support your point.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is mainly because roads are congested and there are few dedicated bike lanes, so riding on main roads can be unsafe. For example, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for commuting, especially during rush hour.

× My mom bought me the bike to encourage me to acquire the bike ride riding skills cause because she think it's essential I spend a lot of time on the bike.

✓ My mom bought me the bike to encourage me to acquire bike-riding skills because she thought it was essential that I spend a lot of time on the bike.

Errors: incorrect verb+ -ing form 'bike ride riding' should be the compound noun 'bike-riding'; redundant conjunctions 'cause because' — keep 'because'; tense/subject-verb agreement 'she think' should be past 'she thought' to match 'bought'; missing complement 'it was essential that I...' Correct by using the gerund form for the activity noun, removing redundancy, and aligning tense and clause structure. Suggestion: use hyphenated compound nouns for activities (bike-riding), ensure subordinate clause verbs match main clause tense, and avoid duplicate conjunctions.

× It's generally not safe for bike rider to stay on the main road as there is no bike lane available.

✓ It's generally not safe for bike riders to stay on the main road as there are no bike lanes available.

Errors: subject 'bike rider' is singular but refers generally to all riders — use plural 'bike riders'; verb agreement 'there is no bike lane' should be plural 'there are no bike lanes' to match plural noun. Also 'stay' is acceptable but 'ride' or 'use' might be more natural. Suggestion: use plurals when speaking generally about groups and ensure subject-verb agreement in 'there is/there are' constructions.