自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify and correct unclear phrasing, avoid redundancy, and provide one specific supporting detail. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking word, and up to five concise sentences. For example, remove the phrase “and without” and replace it with a brief explanation of sharing. Add a linking word like “so” or “therefore” before the result/detail.

範例: Yes, I had a bike that my father gave me. I often shared it with my siblings, so we took turns riding it after school. We rode to the park most afternoons and sometimes used it to run small errands around the neighborhood. It was a simple, sturdy bike that I used until I was a teenager.

建議: Fix repetition and make the statement more specific with supporting reasons or an example. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using a linking word such as “because” or “for example.” Avoid absolute claims like “every student” — instead quantify or give typical situations.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many students use them to commute to school. For example, in my town most pupils ride short distances to avoid crowded buses, and local streets have many bike racks near schools.

× I often shared it with my siblings and without.

✓ I often shared it with my siblings and others.

The phrase 'and without' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended to mean 'and others' or 'and with my siblings and others'. Replace 'without' with 'others' to correctly convey sharing with other people. Ensure coordinating conjunction connects parallel elements (siblings and others).

× Yes, I think it's very popular in in my country because every student uses it when going to school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many students use them when going to school.

There are multiple issues: first, repeated word 'in in' should be 'in'. Second, 'it's' (it is) refers to singular but 'bikes' is plural; use 'bikes are' or rephrase. Third, 'every student uses it' is awkward when talking about bicycles generally; better to use 'many students use them' or 'students use them'. Also change 'it' to 'them' to match plural 'bikes'. This fixes singular/plural agreement and improves naturalness.