自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct the grammar and make the answer slightly more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb forms (e.g., “my dad gave it to me”) and pronoun omissions. Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did — my dad gave me a bike as a Christmas present when I was about eight. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, and I remember practicing tricks with my friends on weekends.

建議: Provide a clear opinion in a topic sentence and follow with specific reasons and a coherent timeline using linking words. Correct sentence structure and use precise time expressions (e.g., “around ten years ago”). Avoid unclear fragments. Limit to two or three sentences.

範例: Not anymore; bikes were much more popular about ten years ago. Back then many people cycled to work or school, but recently car ownership and public transport improvements have made cycling less common.

× My dad given to me as a Christmas present and I used to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon.

✓ My dad gave it to me as a Christmas present, and I used to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon.

The verb 'given' is a past participle and requires an auxiliary (have/has/had) or a passive structure. Here the intended active past simple is 'gave'. Also the verb phrase needs a direct object: 'gave it to me'. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' connecting two independent clauses.

× Not really, but used to popular in my country.

✓ Not really, but bicycles used to be popular in my country.

This sentence lacks a subject and the auxiliary 'be' required with 'used to' when describing a past state: 'used to be'. Also the noun 'bikes' or 'bicycles' should be explicit as the subject. Reorder to: 'bicycles used to be popular...'. 'Not really, but' is a contrast starter and should connect to the corrected clause.

× 10/5 or 10 years ago, but recently most people.

✓ They were popular 10 or 15 years ago, but recently most people do not use them.

Original has missing subject and verb. To compare past and present we need past tense ('were popular') for the earlier time and present tense for the current situation. Also clarify the timeframe '10 or 15 years ago' rather than '10/5'. Add a negative present clause 'do not use them' to make the contrast explicit.

× Doesn't write goodbye as.

✓ People don't write 'goodbye' like that anymore.

This fragment is ungrammatical and lacks a clear subject and object. 'Doesn't write goodbye as' is incorrect word order and missing subject. A natural correction supplies the subject 'people' (or 'they') and a clearer verb phrase: 'don't write 'goodbye' like that anymore.' If the intended meaning differs, choose a subject and complete verb phrase accordingly.