自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, use past tense consistently, and add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how you used it or why it was special). Keep the answer to a maximum of 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “and” or “because.”

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was red and my parents gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend because I loved exploring with my friends.

建議: Give a clearer, more organized response with specific examples and linking words. Begin with a direct statement, then add 2–3 supporting details (reasons, examples, or comparisons). Avoid hesitations and unfinished sentences; use vocabulary relevant to transport and daily life (commute, errands, exercise).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes and running errands because they are cheap and convenient, and others ride regularly for exercise and leisure on weekends.

× Yes, when I was, uh, a child, I do have a bicycle which was, uh, red in colour.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bicycle that was red in colour.

The student used present tense 'do have' while referring to a past time ('when I was a child'). This is a tense error. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Also replace 'which' with 'that' for a restrictive clause and remove filler words. Suggestion: identify the time frame first and then use consistent past-tense verbs (e.g., 'When I was a child, I had a red bicycle').

× Umm, I apolog, uh, I asked my parents to, I got that on my uh, birthday and uh, yes, that was the bicycle I had.

✓ I asked my parents for it and I got it on my birthday; yes, that was the bicycle I had.

The sentence contains fragmented and incorrect verb usage: 'I apolog' is incomplete and unnecessary here. 'I asked my parents to' is missing the object and purpose; use 'asked my parents for it'. Maintain past tense consistently: 'asked' and 'got'. Suggestion: remove false starts and complete the verbs, for example: 'I asked my parents for it and I got it on my birthday.'

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct but stylistically 'bicycles' is more formal than 'bikes' in an exam. No tense or agreement error; suggestion: prefer 'bicycles' in formal speech.

× Uh, people generally use uh, bikes for daily umm, uh, irons, uh, such as doing groceries or going on a, a bicycle, uh, ride to stay fit.

✓ People generally use bicycles for daily errands, such as doing the grocery shopping, or go for a bicycle ride to stay fit.

Multiple issues: 'irons' is an erroneous word; the correct noun is 'errands'. 'Doing groceries' is not idiomatic; use 'doing the grocery shopping' or 'buying groceries'. Maintain parallel structure: 'such as doing the grocery shopping or going for a bicycle ride.' Also prefer 'bicycles' for formality. Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking, use common collocations ('run errands', 'do the grocery shopping').

× For some people, uh, it's also an umm.

✓ For some people, it is also a form of exercise.

The original is incomplete and ends abruptly. Complete the idea by supplying a noun clause 'a form of exercise' or 'a way to stay fit.' Suggestion: anticipate the noun or phrase you want to use and finish the sentence, e.g., 'For some people it is also a way to exercise.'