自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise and grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and simpler phrasing instead of repeating or using awkward words. Link ideas with simple connectors (for example, “but” or “however”) and avoid contradictions (e.g. “never” vs “had”).

範例: No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child. I occasionally borrowed my older brother’s bicycle and we would ride together in the neighborhood, but I found it hard to learn to ride properly and usually gave up after a few tries.

建議: Give a focused, fluent response with fewer hesitations and clearer structure. Begin with a topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use correct terms (e.g. “bicycles” or “motorbikes” depending on context) and avoid filler words. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many middle- and lower-income families rely on them because they are affordable and practical for short trips, such as taking children to school or commuting to work.

× No, we absolutely never had a bike.

✓ No, we absolutely never had a bicycle.

The speaker uses 'a bike' which is acceptable, but later contrasts with 'a bicycle' so consistency is clearer; however this sentence mainly has register issues rather than article errors. Keep article 'a' before a singular countable noun. Suggestion: use 'a bicycle' or keep 'a bike' consistently.

× But when I was younger I had a bicycle, which was actually my brothers though,

✓ But when I was younger I had a bicycle that actually belonged to my brother,

Incorrect possessive form 'my brothers' lacks apostrophe and singular/plural mismatch. Also 'which was actually my brothers though' is informal and ungrammatical. Use possessive 'my brother' with 'belonged to' to show ownership. Suggestion: use 'belonged to my brother' or 'my brother's' (with apostrophe) in formal speech.

× but we used to ride it and I tried to learn them bicycling very hardly,

✓ but we used to ride it, and I tried to learn bicycling very hard,

Multiple issues: 'learn them bicycling' misuses object pronoun 'them'; 'hardly' is incorrect because it means 'barely' instead of 'with difficulty'; subject-verb agreement isn't primary but pronoun misuse and adverb choice are. According to allowed list, pronoun error maps to 12, adverb to 13; here corrected to match meaning: 'learn bicycling very hard' is still awkward. Better: 'I tried very hard to learn to ride' or 'I tried hard to learn to ride.' Suggestion: use 'I tried hard to learn to ride'.

× but all in vain actually, because I never was quite good at it.

✓ but it was all in vain, because I was never very good at it.

Tense and word order: 'all in vain actually' is awkward; 'I never was quite good' places 'never' before 'was' which is acceptable but less natural; use simple past 'was' consistently and place adverb 'never' after subject or use 'was never very good.' Suggestion: 'it was all in vain' and 'I was never very good at it.'

× Yes, actually, my bikes are really uh, are actually very common in our, in my country, umm, every middle class or lower middle class family has a bike uh, when they can't afford a car, they usually uh buy a bike uh, to uh drop off their kids uh, to go for work or do.

✓ Yes, bikes are actually very common in my country; almost every middle-class or lower-middle-class family has a bike. When they can't afford a car, they usually buy a bike to take their kids to school or to get to work.

Multiple errors: repetition 'are really uh, are actually' and filler words; 'every middle class or lower middle class family' needs hyphenation and quantifier 'almost' for accuracy; 'has a bike' singular is OK. 'to drop off their kids' is informal but acceptable; 'to go for work or do' is ungrammatical. Replaced with 'to take their kids to school or to get to work.' Suggestions: remove fillers, use hyphenated adjectives 'middle-class', and use clear infinitives 'to take'/'to get'.