自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response grammatically correct, direct, and add one brief supporting detail. Begin with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add a short reason or detail using a linking word. Keep it natural and no more than 3–4 short sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school because my family lived nearby. As a result, I didn't learn to ride until I was older.

建議: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, however, especially). Avoid repetition and filler words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., capital city, crowded, motorcycles, traffic) and keep to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in Ulaanbaatar. However, the city is very crowded and many young people prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster in heavy traffic. Therefore, while bicycles are used, motorcycles are more common for commuting.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student used present-tense 'don't have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. This is a tense error. Use the past simple 'didn't have' to match the past time. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or states that occurred in the past (didn't have).

× I think so, especially in the capital city, the UB city in Mongolia, cause the UB city is the most crowded city in the world because of the overpopulation and some of the young people, uh, prefer riding a motorcycle in my country. Motorcycle.

✓ I think so, especially in the capital, Ulaanbaatar, because it is very crowded due to overpopulation, and many young people prefer riding motorcycles in my country.

Multiple problems: 'cause' is informal and should be 'because'; repetition 'the UB city' and 'city' is redundant; 'the most crowded city in the world' is a strong claim—use 'very crowded' unless certain; 'some of the young people, uh, prefer riding a motorcycle' has awkward quantifier and singular 'a motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' to be general. This is primarily sentence structure and article/number issues. Suggestions: use 'because' for formal speech, avoid redundancy by saying 'the capital' or 'Ulaanbaatar', match noun number for general preferences (prefer riding motorcycles), and remove filler words.