自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct verb tenses and possessive forms, and avoid redundancy. For example, say when you had the bike and one memory or purpose (e.g., how you used it).

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bike when I was about eight, and I used it every day to visit my friends and practice riding in the park.

建議: Clarify your main idea and avoid mistakes or mixed words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Correct vocabulary errors ("bags" → "bikes") and remove filler words. Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: Yes, I do. Bikes are very popular in China because they are cheap and convenient for short commutes, so many people use them to get to work or school.

× Yes, I have a bike which is purchased by my parents when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that my parents purchased when I was a child.

Two errors: wrong verb form and wrong tense/agreement. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child' (past time). 'Purchased' as past simple is preferred in active voice rather than passive 'is purchased'. Also 'I were' is incorrect; use 'I was' for first person singular in past tense. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events and active voice for clarity: 'I had a bike that my parents purchased when I was a child.'

× Yes I do. I think bags are so popular in my country, especially in China since you know, China, the the bikes are so convenient to drop people to the office.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in China, because bikes are a very convenient way to take people to the office.

Multiple problems: wrong noun 'bags' should be 'bikes' (word choice, here treated as pronoun/word misuse), repeated 'China, China' and repeated 'the the'. Also phrase 'drop people to the office' is incorrect preposition and verb choice. Use 'take people to the office' or 'drop people off at the office.' 'So popular' is acceptable but 'very popular' is more natural. Suggestion: Correct noun, remove repetitions, and use proper verb and preposition: 'take people to the office' or 'drop people off at the office.'