自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good direct response and engaging personal details. To improve, reduce redundancy, tighten sentences, and add a clear linking word to structure the supporting detail. Also avoid vague phrases like “for days” without context and try to include one specific memory or result to enrich the answer.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me, and I learned to ride it in about an hour. After that, I often cycled with my cousins in the afternoons; we especially enjoyed racing along the quiet coastal road near our house, which helped me become more confident and fit.

建議: Clear opinion and relevant example. To improve, correct small hesitations/repetitions, use linking words to contrast (e.g., 'although' or 'however'), and provide a specific detail or data point or brief explanation about infrastructure to support the claim.

範例: Bicycles have become more popular recently. During the pandemic many people took up cycling to get fresh air and exercise; however, cycling remains limited because the Philippines is largely car-centric and lacks safe bike lanes in most cities.

× I learned biking actually in just one hour and I really enjoyed it.

✓ I actually learned to ride a bike in just one hour, and I really enjoyed it.

The original sentence uses 'learned biking' which is not the correct verb pattern. In English, we usually say 'learned to ride a bike' or 'learned riding' is less natural. Also the adverb 'actually' fits better before the verb phrase. Rearranging improves clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: Use 'learned to ride a bike' for clarity and place adverbs before the verb phrase.

× With my cousins, we would bike during the afternoons for days and we would race each other on the roads.

✓ My cousins and I would bike in the afternoons for days and race each other on the roads.

The phrase 'With my cousins, we' is awkward and redundant; English prefers 'My cousins and I' as the subject. Also 'during the afternoons for days' is awkward — 'in the afternoons for days' or 'for days in the afternoons' is clearer. Removing the repeated 'we would' in the second clause makes the sentence smoother. Suggestion: Use 'My cousins and I' as subject and avoid repeating auxiliary verbs unnecessarily.

× I think bikes have been recently popular in our in my country.

✓ I think bikes have recently become popular in my country.

The original has redundant words 'in our in my country' and an awkward tense/form 'have been recently popular'. Use present perfect with 'become' ('have recently become popular') to express a recent change that continues to the present. Also replace 'in our in my country' with 'in my country.' Suggestion: Use 'have recently become popular' to describe a recent trend that is still relevant.

× For example, during the pandemic a lot of people picked up biking as a hobby due to wanting to go outside.

✓ For example, during the pandemic a lot of people picked up biking as a hobby because they wanted to go outside.

The phrase 'due to wanting to go outside' is awkward because 'due to' usually modifies nouns; prefer 'because they wanted to go outside' which correctly introduces the reason clause. This clarifies who wanted to go outside and makes the sentence grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'because they wanted to...' for reason clauses rather than 'due to' plus a gerund.

× However, the Philippines is really car centric.

✓ However, the Philippines is really car-centric.

Compound modifiers like 'car-centric' are typically hyphenated when used before or after the noun. Also 'car centric' as two words is incorrect; hyphenated 'car-centric' is standard. No tense change is needed. Suggestion: Use the hyphenated form 'car-centric' for compound adjectives.