自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子需要更自然、语法更准确，并避免冗长或不连贯的表达。注意时间表达（例如“when I was 10”而不是“when I was 10 years ago”），名词使用（presentation → present），以及词汇搭配（fixed two extra rows → fitted training wheels）。可把回答控制在3-4句：直接回答、给出时间和来源、描述细节并用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it for my tenth birthday from my parents, and it was the first time I learned to ride. They fitted training wheels to help me at the start, and after a few weeks I could ride without them.

建議: 回答需要更完整、避免未完成的句子，并使用更恰当的词汇和连词。注意语法（public shared bike → public bike-sharing systems）和表达流畅性。给出具体原因和例子，例如环境保护、通勤便利、政府政策等，且句子不超过五句。

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many cities have public bike-sharing systems that people use for short commutes. This helps reduce traffic congestion and air pollution, so cycling is encouraged by local authorities.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

句子使用了一般过去时，助动词 did 用于否定和疑问句或强调。陈述句中不需要 did + 动词原形，直接用过去式 had 即可。建议直接使用“had”。

× When I was 10 years ago, it was my birthday presentation that my parents sent to me and that was my first time trying to ride a bike.

✓ When I was 10 years old, my parents gave me a bike for my birthday, and it was my first time trying to ride one.

原句结构混乱："When I was 10 years ago" 中同时用了时间点和“ago”，应为“when I was 10 years old”或“10 years ago”。“birthday presentation” 用词不当，应为“birthday present”或“gave me a bike”。此外，使用了冗长和不自然的被动结构。建议把句子拆成更自然的顺序，使用过去时态的主动语态。 (建议：把时间表达改为“When I was 10 years old”，把“presentation”改为“present/ gave me a bike”，并把从句简化为并列句。)

× When I was 10 years ago, it was my birthday presentation that my parents sent to me and that was my first time trying to ride a bike.

✓ When I was 10 years old, my parents gave me a bike for my birthday, and it was my first time trying to ride one.

短语“sent to me”在此语境中不自然，父母通常用“gave (me) a gift”而不是“sent to me”。此外“presentation”是拼写/用词错误，应为“present”。建议使用“gave me a bike”或“gave me a present”。

× My parents fixed two extra rows to help.

✓ My parents fixed two extra training wheels to help.

原句中“rows”是拼写或用词错误，应为“wheels”（轮子）; 另外“training wheels”（辅轮/辅助轮）是更自然的表达。动词 fixed 用法可以接受，但补充“training”能明确意思。建议使用“fixed two extra training wheels”来表达父母为帮助稳定而安装辅轮。

× You can see bikes almost everywhere.

✓ You can see bikes almost everywhere in my country.

原句本身语法正确，但在回答“in your country?”的问题时，补上地点更完整。建议明确地点以契合问题语境。

× In my country we have the public shared bike that can help people to build the sense of Environment Protection and reduce the.

✓ In my country we have public shared bikes that help people develop a sense of environmental protection and reduce pollution.

原句存在多处问题：1) “the public shared bike” 不需要定冠词且应使用复数“bikes”；2) “build the sense of Environment Protection” 用词和大小写错误，应为“develop a sense of environmental protection”；3) 句子结尾不完整，应补上具体想要减少的名词，如“pollution”。建议使用“public shared bikes”或“public bike-sharing systems”，并使用“develop”代替“build”，小写“environmental”。