自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details (when you got the bike, who bought it, what you did with it). Use correct tense and simple connectors. Avoid repetition and filler words. Pronunciation of numbers and nouns should be clearer.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was about eight or nine, and I often rode it around our neighborhood after school. It was an old red bike with a worn bell, but I loved riding it with my friends every weekend.

建議: Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then support it with two clear reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Use correct grammar for nouns and countable forms (e.g., 'public transport' not 'public transfer', 'many people' not 'some of us'). Reduce hesitations and give one short example to make it specific.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. This is because public transport is often unreliable and many people cannot afford cars, so they choose bikes as a cheap and flexible option. For instance, students and market vendors commonly use bicycles to travel short distances and carry goods.

× 'Yes, I used to have a I used to ride a bike around my neighborhood and my mom bought that for me like when I have eighth or nine years old.'

✓ 'Yes, I used to ride a bike around my neighborhood, and my mom bought it for me when I was eight or nine years old.'

'The original mixes present tense with past habits and uses incorrect word order and pronouns. Use the past tense "was" for age in the past and replace the redundant phrase "used to have a I used to ride" with "used to ride". Also use the object pronoun "it" to refer to the bike. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past events and use correct pronouns and word order.'

× 'So yeah, I used to buy when I remember that was like really old and like with the the.'

✓ 'So yeah, I remember it was really old.'

'The original sentence incorrectly uses "used to buy" and an awkward structure. Since the speaker is recalling a past state, use "I remember it was really old." Remove repetition and filler words. Suggestion: use simple past or "I remember" + clause for recollections.'

× 'Yes, of course there is a popular in my country because we don't usually have like enough, uh, public transport people don't have the economic support to buy a car or buy like a motorbike.'

✓ 'Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country because we don't usually have enough public transport, and many people cannot afford to buy a car or a motorbike.'

'The original has a singular/plural mismatch "there is a popular" and awkward phrasing. Use plural "bikes are popular." Replace "people don't have the economic support" with "many people cannot afford" for natural English. Suggestion: ensure subject number matches verb and use common collocations like "afford to buy." '},{