自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words. For example, use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and add a brief specific detail (when you rode it, where, or a memory) to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child, but I lost it soon after I got it. Although I don’t remember many details, I enjoyed riding it in the park near my house during weekends, and that’s why I still like cycling today.

建議: Clarify vocabulary, reduce hesitation and organize the answer with one clear reason and a specific example. Replace unclear phrases (e.g. “share share spike”, “shirt's bike”) with correct terms like “shared bikes” or “bike-sharing services.” Use linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”) to connect ideas and provide a specific illustration of how people use bikes.

範例: Yes. Shared bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to travel short distances, for example to reach subway stations or commute to work. For instance, I often see commuters leaving a shared bike near the metro entrance during rush hour, which shows how convenient they are.

× Yes, when I was our children I have a bike but I lost it later when I first get it, so I don't have a deep impression on it.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike, but I lost it not long after I got it, so I don't have a strong impression of it.

The sentence uses incorrect pronoun phrase 'our children' instead of 'a child' (plural vs singular and wrong referent) and mixes tenses. Use 'a child' to refer to oneself in childhood. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. 'When I first get it' should be past 'when I first got it' or better 'not long after I got it'. 'Deep impression on' is incorrect collocation; use 'strong impression of'. Ensure tense consistency (past) throughout the sentence.

× But I really like cycling and I like riding a bike when I was a in my free time.

✓ But I really liked cycling and I liked riding a bike in my free time.

The clause combines present tense 'like' with 'when I was' which requires past tense. Change 'like' to 'liked' to maintain past-time reference. Also remove the extraneous 'a' after 'was a' and place 'in my free time' correctly. If the speaker means they still like cycling now, keep present tense and remove 'when I was', for example: 'But I really like cycling and I like riding a bike in my free time.'

× Yes uh, especially the share share spike, umm, because many people use the shirt's bike to go to the underground station and go to work.

✓ Yes, especially the shared bike service, because many people use shared bikes to go to the subway station and to work.

The original has unclear/repeated words 'share share spike' and 'shirt's bike' which appear to be misused nouns. Use the correct noun 'shared bike' or 'shared bike service'. 'Many people use shared bikes' is the correct plural form. Also 'underground station' is acceptable but 'subway station' is more natural in this context. Maintain noun consistency and plurality.

× It's very convenient for them and many people in China need them.

✓ It's very convenient for them and many people in China use them.

'Need them' is not incorrect grammatically but 'use them' better expresses habitual action. Also ensure pronoun 'them' correctly refers back to 'shared bikes'. The suggestion changes verb to match intended meaning.

× So I think the bikes are very popular in our country.

✓ So I think bikes are very popular in my country.

Use 'bikes' without 'the' for general statement and 'my country' instead of 'our country' since the speaker refers to their own country. Subject-verb agreement is fine, but article and pronoun use are adjusted for naturalness and correctness.