自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., saying “fascinated,” “desire,” and “passionate” together). Also correct grammar: use past simple for childhood events and shorten long phrases.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it about six years ago and spent a lot of time learning to ride it. As a result, I’m still confident cycling today.

建議: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words. Use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating words (e.g., “gas” twice). Provide one clear reason and a brief example. Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines. For example, many students and workers use bicycles because they are cheap to run and do not need petrol, which is expensive here.

× I do have a bike before, I think it was six years ago to be exact, and I was really fascinated with bikes and I have so much desire about it and I was passionate about learning it and up until now I can still use my skills.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child; I think it was six years ago to be exact. I was really fascinated with bikes, I had a strong desire for them, and I was passionate about learning to ride. Even now I can still use those skills.

Multiple tense and verb form problems: 'do have a bike before' mixes present 'do have' with 'before' (past), so use past 'had'. 'I have so much desire about it' uses incorrect collocation and tense; use 'had a strong desire for them'. 'learning it' is incorrect; use 'learning to ride' or 'learning how to ride'. 'up until now I can still use my skills' is acceptable but clearer as 'Even now I can still use those skills.' Suggestions: keep past events in past tense, use correct verb patterns (learn to do), and use appropriate collocations (desire for, fascinated with/about).

× I think bikes are really popular here in the Philippines since I see many people use it as a transportation for school and sometimes even work since it doesn't really require gas and gas here is really much expensive.

✓ I think bicycles are really popular here in the Philippines since I see many people use them for transportation to school and sometimes for work, because they don't really require gasoline and gas is very expensive here.

Several issues: 'bikes' is fine but 'bicycles' is more formal; main errors: 'many people use it' has a pronoun-number mismatch—use 'them' to match plural 'people'/'bicycles' (Pronoun error, ID 12 and subject-verb agreement). 'as a transportation' is incorrect; use 'for transportation' or 'as transportation' (preposition/article error, ID 11 and 22). 'to school' instead of 'for school' is more natural for purpose; 'sometimes even work' needs preposition 'for work'. 'since it doesn't really require gas' — 'it' ambiguous and singular; use 'they' and 'gasoline' or 'fuel'. 'gas here is really much expensive' incorrect adverb/adjective order and word choice; use 'gas is very expensive here' or 'fuel is much more expensive here'. Suggestions: match pronouns and nouns in number, use 'for transportation/to school/for work', use 'they' for plural antecedents, and prefer 'gasoline' or 'fuel' and correct adverb placement ('very expensive', 'much more expensive').