自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and naturalness, be concise, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "when they are children") and correct pronoun and article errors ("it was a child" → "when I was a child", "a common thing" → "common"). Use linking words like "however" or "because" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was black with green stripes, and although my dad said it looked like a boy’s bike, I loved the colour, so I insisted on keeping it. Because it was sturdy and comfortable, I rode it to my friends’ houses almost every day.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant with good supporting detail. To reach a higher score, add a brief specific example or comparison and a linking word to strengthen coherence (e.g., "for example," or "as a result,"). Also vary vocabulary slightly (use "commuting" or "short trips") and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular where I live. For example, the city has built extensive bike lanes and dedicated paths, so many people use bikes for short commutes or exercise. As a result, cycling has become a common and convenient way to travel around town.

× Of course I had a bicycle when it was a child.

✓ Of course I had a bicycle when I was a child.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to the speaker; the correct subject pronoun for a person is 'I'. Replace 'it' with 'I' to match the speaker and maintain meaning.

× It's common thing for children when they're when they are children.

✓ It's a common thing for children.

The sentence is repetitive and contains an unnecessary clause 'when they're when they are children.' Remove the redundant part and add the indefinite article 'a' before 'common thing' to make the noun phrase grammatical.

× My dad insisted it was a boy's bike, but I really like the color so I insisted on keeping it.

✓ My dad insisted it was a boy's bike, but I really liked the color, so I insisted on keeping it.

Tense inconsistency: the rest of the narrative is in the past ('had', 'was'), so 'like' should be in the past form 'liked' to maintain past-tense narration. Also add a comma before 'so' to join the clauses correctly.