自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct awkward phrases (e.g., "applied with my friends"), and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas. Limit your answer to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I loved riding my bike to school and often went cycling with my friends after classes. Because we lived near quiet streets, we practiced riding tricks and built up our confidence over time.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons and avoid filler words ("uh"). Correct awkward phrasing ("cars sealed to emissions" is unclear). Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' and give a concrete example or statistic if possible. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular. Because people are more worried about air pollution and traffic, many commuters now choose cycling for short trips; for example, city bike-share schemes have grown a lot in recent years.

× I loved going to school by bike, and I also used the bike when I applied with my friends.

✓ I loved going to school by bike, and I also rode the bike with my friends.

The original uses 'applied with my friends', which is incorrect verb choice. 'Apply' does not collocate with riding a bike. Use 'rode' (past tense of 'ride') to describe past action. This fits the past simple tense already established by 'I loved'. Suggestion: replace incorrect verb with 'rode' or use 'went cycling with my friends' for clarity.

× And yeah, I loved spending time practicing bicycling.

✓ And yeah, I loved spending time practicing cycling.

'Practicing bicycling' is awkward and uses redundant forms. Use 'practicing cycling' or 'practicing riding a bike'. 'Cycling' as a gerund is more natural after 'practicing'. Suggestion: say 'practicing cycling' or 'practicing riding a bike'.

× Uh, because more and more people have been concerned about the cars sealed to emissions.

✓ Uh, because more and more people have become concerned about cars' emissions.

The phrase 'cars sealed to emissions' is ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is concern about 'cars' emissions'. Use 'have become concerned' rather than 'have been concerned' for change of state, and use possessive 'cars' emissions' or 'emissions from cars'. Suggestion: use 'have become concerned about cars' emissions' or 'are concerned about emissions from cars'.

× So I feel like, uh, many people are getting more interested in trying bicycling.

✓ So I feel like, uh, many people are becoming more interested in taking up cycling.

'Trying bicycling' is awkward; native speakers say 'taking up cycling', 'trying cycling', or 'trying riding a bike'. Also 'getting more interested' can be 'becoming more interested'. Use 'cycling' instead of 'bicycling' for naturalness. Suggestion: say 'becoming more interested in taking up cycling' or 'becoming more interested in trying cycling'.