自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Pronunciation, grammar and clarity need improvement. Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two concise, specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and simple vocabulary (e.g. “bike” not “eye”, “was” not “were”), and connect ideas with linking words (e.g. “and”, “so”, “for example”). Keep answers to no more than five sentences and avoid unclear phrases like “go out of snow” or “what help me stay up till”.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it to ride to the park with my friends. For example, every afternoon after school I would cycle to the playground and we would play until dinner. Riding my bike helped me get exercise and made me feel independent.

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid unrelated words or invented phrases. Use clear reasons and one supporting example. Use linking words (e.g. “because”, “for example”, “so”) correctly and complete your sentences. Keep language simple and grammatically correct: subject-verb agreement and correct nouns (e.g. “bikes” not “buy a Motorola”).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people prefer them for short trips and to avoid traffic. For example, in cities there are many bike lanes and students often cycle to school. Because cycling is cheap and environmentally friendly, more people choose bikes for daily travel.

× Well yes, I had the eye when I were a child.

✓ Well yes, I had the bike when I was a child.

Pronoun/word error and subject-verb agreement: 'the eye' is wrong word; likely meant 'the bike'. Also 'were' is incorrect for singular subject 'I' in past simple; use 'was'. Suggestion: use correct noun and match past tense form: 'I was'.

× It was a small red bag with chaining wheels and I used it to ride to the park and play with my friends.

✓ It was a small red bike with chain wheels and I used it to ride to the park and play with my friends.

Word choice and noun form: 'bag' is incorrect for 'bike' and 'chaining wheels' is incorrect phrase; use 'chain wheels' or better 'a chain' or 'chain-driven wheels'. Suggestion: say 'small red bike with a chain' or 'with chain-driven wheels'.

× For example, I would go out of snow every afternoon after school and what help me stay up till and my friends.

✓ For example, I would go out every afternoon after school to ride with my friends.

Multiple structural and word errors: 'go out of snow' is meaningless; 'what help me stay up till and my friends' is ungrammatical. Simplify to intended meaning: regular past habit 'would go out every afternoon after school to ride with my friends'. Use infinitive 'to ride' and correct object 'with my friends'.

× Yes, I actually think buy a Motorola in my country because that's a that's a project environment without pollution or impact climate change.

✓ Yes, I actually think bikes are popular in my country because they provide a practical, low-pollution way to travel and have less impact on climate change.

Many errors: 'buy a Motorola' is irrelevant; repeated 'that's a that's a project environment' is incorrect; word choice and sentence structure wrong. Reconstruct sentence to answer question: state opinion on popularity and give reason. Use plural 'bikes' and appropriate relative clause. Use consistent present tense for general fact.

× So when when you buy.

✓ So people often choose to buy bikes for those reasons.

Fragmentary sentence lacking verb and object. Turn into a full sentence: indicate the result of previous sentence. Use plural subject 'people' and present tense 'choose' to describe general behavior.