自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and repeated words. Also correct grammar (e.g., “my parents bought me a bike” and “successfully riding it helped build my confidence”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, include a short reason or example.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small blue bike when I was seven so I could learn to ride. As I practiced with them in our neighborhood every weekend, I gradually became more confident because I could ride unassisted and go farther on my own.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer and one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and repetitions. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “shared bikes” not “shirt bikes”) and complete your explanation (mention policies or cost pressures briefly). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences with logical linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular now. In recent years, shared bike schemes have grown rapidly because public transport and fuel costs have risen; for example, many people use app-based bikes for short trips to save money.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child umm, my parents bought that bike like for me to practice umm uh, for me to practice like how to ride a bike uh.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought the bike for me so I could practice how to ride.

The original uses 'did have' unnecessarily; simple past 'had' is correct for a past state. The clause 'bought that bike like for me to practice' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'bought the bike for me so I could practice how to ride' to express purpose; replace colloquial fillers and remove repetition. Suggestion: Use simple past for past possession and a purpose clause with 'so' + modal 'could' for ability in the past.

× Success successfully riding a bike can help me build up my confidence and just build up.

✓ Successfully riding a bike helped me build up my confidence.

The sentence mixes present and past time references. The student is talking about childhood experience, so past reference is required. Use 'riding' correctly as a gerund preceded by the adverb 'successfully'. Remove redundant 'build up' repetition. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame (use past 'helped') and avoid repetition.

× Yeah, I think it's very popular in my country because umm just just recent years or maybe just several years before and then umm, the shirt bikes has been has been a very popular because umm, the transportation cost has has has has been raising so like the the policy they.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. In recent years they have become more popular because transportation costs have been rising and government policies have encouraged their use.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'it's very popular' is vague; 'bikes' (plural) requires 'are'. 'Just recent years' should be 'in recent years'. 'The shirt bikes has been' is unclear and incorrect; likely 'shared bikes' or 'cheap bikes' was intended—here corrected to 'they have become more popular'. Use present perfect continuous 'have been rising' for ongoing change in costs. 'Policy they' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'government policies have encouraged their use.' Suggestion: Use plural agreement for 'bikes', proper time expressions ('in recent years'), and present perfect/progressive for trends; avoid filler words.