自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("very, very"), use correct adjective order and prepositions ("green" or "green-colored", not both; "in good condition" should be "in very good condition"), and give a precise age rather than "7 or 8" if possible. Use one or two supporting details linked with a simple connector (e.g., "and").

範例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was green and in very good condition, and my father gave it to me for my seventh birthday.

建議: Improve coherence and grammar: open with a clear opinion, avoid repetition, remove filler words, and use correct noun phrases (e.g., "bike lanes" not "biking"). Use linking words to organise reasons (e.g., "because" + specific reasons). Provide one or two specific examples of facilities or policies to make your answer more concrete.

範例: Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many new bike lanes and parking facilities have been built recently, and local governments are encouraging cycling to reduce traffic congestion.

× It was green colored and it was very, very in good condition.

✓ It was green and it was in very good condition.

Using 'green colored' is redundant; 'green' alone is correct. The phrase 'very, very in good condition' misplaces 'in'; correct phrase is 'in very good condition'. Remove repeated 'very' or keep one for emphasis. Suggestion: say 'It was green and in very good condition.'

× I remember my father gave it to me for my birthday when I just was 7 or 8 years old.

✓ I remember my father gave it to me for my birthday when I was about 7 or 8 years old.

Word order 'just was' is incorrect; the correct order is 'was just' or better 'was about' to indicate approximation. Use 'about' for ages. Keep past tense 'gave' and 'was'.

× Yeah, bikes are very popular in my country because nowadays in my country there are biking, roads are being built and more comfort, more facilities are being are being introduced in our country.

✓ Yeah, bikes are very popular in my country because nowadays there is more cycling, roads are being built, and more comfort and facilities are being introduced.

Several issues: 'there are biking' is ungrammatical; use 'there is more cycling' or 'more people are cycling'. Repetition 'are being are being' is an error. Use singular 'there is' with uncountable noun 'cycling'. Combine 'more comfort, more facilities' into 'more comfort and facilities' for natural phrasing. Maintain present progressive 'are being built/introduced' to match 'nowadays.'

× Yeah, it's it's pretty popular.

✓ Yeah, it's pretty popular.

Repeated 'it's' is a spoken hesitation but counts as redundancy in written form. Remove the duplicated pronoun. Use a single 'it's' to mean 'it is'.