自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and use past simple consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove repetitive fillers and correct tense/word order.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a pink three-wheeled bike when I was about five, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood. Because it was stable, I felt confident learning to pedal and steer, so I used it almost every evening.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (however, although, because, for example) and avoid hesitations. Be concise and finish the thought clearly.

範例: Not really — although some people cycle, most prefer walking because our climate is hot and humid. For example, many residents only cycle for exercise in parks during the cooler hours after 5 pm, while others choose walking for short trips because it is more comfortable.

× Well, when I was a child I do have a bike.

✓ Well, when I was a child I had a bike.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so the present tense 'do have' is incorrect. Use simple past 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about finished events in the past.

× I do have like a three wheel bike, a pink one.

✓ I had a three-wheel bike, a pink one.

When describing the bike, 'three wheel' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'three-wheel'. Also 'do have' is present tense; change to past 'had' to match past context. Suggestion: use hyphen for compound adjectives before a noun and match verb tense to time reference.

× I love that I I do have that by when I was like 5 years old or something like that.

✓ I loved that bike when I was about five years old.

The sentence mixes present 'love' and present 'do have' with a past time marker 'when I was 5 years old'. Use past tense 'loved' and simplify wording. Also remove duplicate 'I' and awkward 'by'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent, avoid filler words ('like', 'or something like that') in formal responses.

× Uh, as a hot country, hot and humid country, I would say people in my country, they prefer to walk instead of umm, cycling.

✓ Since my country is hot and humid, I would say people prefer to walk instead of cycling.

The phrase 'as a hot country, hot and humid country' is awkward; use 'Since my country is hot and humid'. Also remove redundant subject 'people in my country, they' — choose one. Tense is modal 'would say' which is fine; ensure subject-verb consistency: 'people prefer'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use clear introductory clause for reasons.

× But some still do.

✓ But some people still do.

The pronoun 'some' is vague; in this context 'some people' is clearer and grammatically complete. Suggestion: include a noun after 'some' when context needs clarity.

× They do have an exercise with bike in the park during the day, like after 5 or something like that, but.

✓ They exercise on bikes in the park during the day, usually after five o'clock.

'Do have an exercise with bike' is ungrammatical. Use the verb 'exercise' with the prepositional phrase 'on bikes' or 'by cycling'. Also use 'usually after five o'clock' instead of vague 'like after 5 or something'. Remove trailing 'but'. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('exercise on bikes', 'go cycling') and clear time expressions.