自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сократите и структурируйте ответ: начните с короткого утверждения, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных подробности. Избегайте лишних слов и ошибок порядка слов. Работайте над прошедшим временем и согласованием (например, "my parents gave me a bike"), а также над связками (например, "After school, I often rode my bike with my friends").

範例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike for my birthday, and I was really happy. After school I often rode it with my friends around the neighborhood.

建議: Дайте более ясный и связный ответ: начните с прямого мнения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины, используя связки (например, "because", "also"). Избегайте заполнителей («uh») и повтора слов. Исправьте грамматику (например, "bikes are healthy for people" или "bikes are popular because they are healthy and affordable").

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. They are healthy because cycling is good exercise, and they are also affordable and convenient for short trips in cities.

× Honestly yes, when I was a child I remember my parents in my birthday give the bike then I was very happy and every after schools I ride my bike with my friends.

✓ Honestly, yes. When I was a child I remember my parents giving me a bike on my birthday. I was very happy and after school I rode my bike with my friends.

The sentence contains several past-tense errors and wrong verb forms. Use past continuous/simple past consistently for past events: 'remember' can be followed by a gerund phrase describing the event (my parents giving me a bike) or you can say 'I remember that my parents gave me a bike.' The phrase 'in my birthday' is incorrect preposition and should be 'on my birthday.' 'Every after schools' is ungrammatical; use 'after school' to describe routine following school. The verb 'ride' should match the past time frame and become 'rode.' Suggestions: replace 'remember my parents in my birthday give the bike' with 'remember my parents giving me a bike on my birthday' or 'I remember that my parents gave me a bike on my birthday.' Ensure verbs reflect past tense (gave/rode) and use correct prepositions ('on my birthday,' 'after school').

× Yes, of course. I think because bikes are very, uh, healthy thing in the people people as well as atop.

✓ Yes, of course. I think bikes are very healthy for people and are also popular as a mode of transport.

The original mixes incorrect noun phrases and prepositions and uses wrong article usage with 'healthy thing' and 'in the people people.' Use 'healthy for people' to express benefit. 'As well as atop' is meaningless here; likely intended 'as a mode of transport' or 'as transportation.' Also avoid repeating words. Suggestions: say 'bikes are very healthy for people' and add a clear phrase like 'and are also popular as a mode of transport.'