自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Bạn nên cải thiện tính mạch lạc và ngữ pháp cơ bản. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng; (2) Sử dụng thì quá khứ nhất quán (I had / I used to); (3) Loại bỏ từ thừa và sửa phát âm/ghi âm nếu cần; (4) Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (ví dụ: how often, how far, who with) và dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, and). Hãy giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it every day to ride to school because my house was about two kilometers away. It was an old but reliable bike that my parents bought for me. I often rode with my friends on the way, so it was both practical and fun.

建議: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp nhưng cần hoàn thiện ngôn ngữ và mở rộng ý với chi tiết cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Tránh lặp từ (e.g., "than than"); (2) Dùng liên từ để nêu lý do và ví dụ (for example, because, also); (3) Thêm thông tin cụ thể về mức độ phổ biến hoặc bối cảnh (e.g., ở thành phố, nông thôn, nhóm tuổi); (4) Giữ câu súc tích, tối đa 5 câu.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are especially common in cities and small towns because they are inexpensive and easy to park. For example, many students and office workers commute by bike to avoid traffic and save money. Additionally, there are several bike lanes in larger cities which encourages more people to cycle.

× A call. Wars I had a bike to go to my my school and because. Bike was really cheap.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I had a bike to go to my school because it was really cheap.

The original utterance contains fragmented phrases, repeated words and incorrect sentence order. Combine fragments into complete sentences and remove repetition. Use 'When I was a child' to set the time frame, 'I had a bike' as the main clause, 'to go to my school' as purpose, and 'because it was really cheap' to give the reason. This improves coherence and grammatical structure.

× Absolutely, because going to somewhere by bike is cheaper than than by car or by coach, etcetera.

✓ Absolutely, because going somewhere by bike is cheaper than going by car or by coach, etc.

Use 'going somewhere' rather than 'going to somewhere'. Remove the repeated 'than'. Maintain parallel structure by repeating the verb 'going' or using 'going by' for both comparisons: 'going somewhere by bike is cheaper than going by car'. Also shorten 'etcetera' to 'etc.' or omit it in formal speech.