自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, use correct tense consistency and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use past tense for childhood) and remove redundancy (e.g., "at that time").

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, a few years later my friends taught me how to ride, and when I became a teenager my family bought me one, which I used to cycle to school.

建議: Give a direct opinion then add specific supporting reasons or examples, using linking words for coherence. Avoid awkward phrasing like "considered as" and combine ideas into one clear sentence. Add a specific example or contrast.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work in crowded cities, and bike lanes in some areas make cycling safer.

× No, I do not.

✓ No, I didn't.

The question asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the response should use past tense. 'Do not' is present tense; 'didn't' is the correct past-tense negative form of 'do'. Use past tense to match the time frame.

× When I was a child I didn't even know how to ride a bike, but after a few years my friends helped me to ride a bike and when I became a teenager at that time my family and my friends gave a bike to.

✓ When I was a child I didn't even know how to ride a bike, but after a few years my friends helped me learn, and when I became a teenager my family and friends gave me a bike.

Several issues: 'helped me to ride a bike' is awkward; use 'helped me learn' or 'helped me to learn to ride a bike'. 'When I became a teenager at that time' is redundant—use 'when I became a teenager'. 'gave a bike to' has incorrect word order; the correct order is 'gave me a bike'. Maintain past tense throughout to match 'when I was a child' and 'after a few years'.

× They are considered as a prominent mode of transportation and it is also very easy and convenient.

✓ They are considered a prominent mode of transportation, and they are also very easy and convenient.

Do not use 'considered as' in this context; 'considered a' is correct. Also, 'it is also very easy and convenient' uses 'it' incorrectly to refer to plural 'bikes'—use 'they are'. Ensure subject and verb agree in number and use correct preposition structure.