自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify the meaning and remove contradictions. Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use natural phrasing (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike, but I did have a bicycle” is contradictory because 'bike' and 'bicycle' are usually the same—decide whether you mean a motorbike or a simple bike). Keep it to 1–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: No, I didn’t have a motorbike when I was a child. Instead, I had a simple pedal bicycle that I used to ride around the neighborhood after school, which helped me build confidence and balance.

建議: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 2–3 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘for example’, ‘also’). Avoid hesitation sounds and vague phrases like ‘very great’. Use precise vocabulary (affordable, practical, convenient) and one example to support your point.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for daily commuting. For example, many young people and older commuters use motorcycles to avoid traffic, and manufacturers offer a wide range of budget models that are fuel-efficient and easy to maintain.

× No, I need.

✓ No, I don't.

The student used 'need' incorrectly as a response. A short negative reply requires the auxiliary 'do' in present simple: 'I don't' or full 'I do not'. Use 'need' only when expressing necessity (e.g. 'I need one'). Suggestion: Use 'I don't' for simple negation in conversation.

× No, I did not have any bike, but I had a bicycle with me.

✓ No, I did not have a bike, but I had a bicycle.

The phrase 'any bike' is awkward here; 'a bike' is correct because the student is referring to a single item in past tense. Also 'with me' is unnecessary and unnatural in this context. Suggestion: Use 'a bike' for singular countable nouns after 'did not have' when referring to one item.

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because people of my age and also people from other age groups do like to ride their bikes, especially motorcycles.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because people my age and people from other age groups like to ride them, especially motorcycles.

Repetition 'people of my age and also people from other age groups' is wordy; 'people my age and people from other age groups' is clearer. Using 'do like' is unnecessary emphatic present tense; simple present 'like' is more natural. Also replace the repeated noun 'their bikes' with the pronoun 'them' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing and simple present for habitual actions.

× And the motorcycles which are available in my country are very uh affordable and the design of all the motorbikes are very great so.

✓ The motorcycles available in my country are very affordable, and the design of the motorbikes is great.

Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'which are'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the design... is' (design is singular), so use 'is' rather than 'are'. 'Very great' is awkward; use 'great' or 'very attractive/appealing'. Also avoid ending with 'so' in this context. Suggestion: Use concise relative clauses, correct subject-verb agreement, and choose natural adjective collocations (e.g. 'very affordable', 'attractive design').