自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and correct tense/possession errors. Add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how you used it, your feelings) and use a linking word if needed.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it actually belonged to my father. I often rode it to visit friends and run small errands, so it felt like my own; consequently, I became more independent as a child.

建議: Give a clear direct answer first, then provide two specific reasons with proper grammar and linking words. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., motorcycles, scooters, commuters).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Sri Lanka. Firstly, many affordable motorcycles and scooters are both imported and manufactured locally, so people can buy them easily; secondly, they are convenient for daily commuting in crowded cities, which makes them a common choice for many families.

× I had a bike when I was child, but it's not, uh, belongs to me, but because, uh, it was my father's motorcycle.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, but it didn't belong to me because it was my father's motorcycle.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and incorrect verb phrase 'it's not...belongs to me'. Use 'a child' (article error, ID 22). Also use simple past negative 'didn't belong' instead of present 'belongs' to match past tense context (past tense issue, ID 5). Suggestions: add the article 'a' before 'child' and use 'didn't belong' or 'did not belong' to express past possession; remove redundant phrases like 'it's not' to make the sentence clear.

× I think because there are a lot of bikes, different kinds of bikes in Sri Lanka that was imported and manufactured as well.

✓ I think there are a lot of bikes, different kinds in Sri Lanka that were imported and manufactured as well.

Errors: subject-verb tense mismatch with 'that was imported' referring to plural 'bikes' — use plural past 'were imported' (past tense issue, ID 5). Also the phrase 'different kinds of bikes' can be shortened to 'different kinds' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'there are' for present existence and 'were imported' for the past action applied to plural noun. This keeps tenses consistent and grammatically correct.

× And umm, most of the people used to use their bikes to travel day by day and, uh.

✓ And most people used to use their bikes to travel every day.

Errors: redundant article 'the' before 'people' is unnecessary (article error, ID 22) and 'day by day' is awkward for habitual action; 'every day' is correct. 'Used to use' is acceptable for past habitual action; keep past tense consistent (past tense issue, ID 5). Suggestions: remove 'the' before 'people' and replace 'day by day' with 'every day' to sound natural.