自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details (when, who gave it, how you used it). Avoid repetition and filler words. Use past tense consistently (I didn’t have / I had). Keep it under five sentences and use linking words like "but" or "however" only if contrasting information is needed.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school. However, I loved watching other children ride and I practiced balancing on a tricycle until I was older.

建議: Answer directly and provide clear reasons with specific details. Start with a topic sentence (Yes/No/Partly). Use linking words (because, so, therefore) correctly and avoid repeating phrases. Use present or past tense consistently and give one or two concrete examples (urban use, students, delivery riders).

範例: Yes, bikes used to be very popular in my country, especially a few decades ago, because many families could not afford cars. As a result, people relied on bicycles for daily travel and children rode to school. Today, motorcycles and cars are more common, but bicycles are still popular among students and delivery workers.

× Tomorrow asleep, I don't have a bike when I was child, however, uh, I would like, I will, uh, I want, I want to to, I want to become a bike because I like bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike. However, I wanted to have one because I like bikes.

Multiple issues: incorrect time phrase 'Tomorrow asleep' is meaningless, wrong tense use 'I don't have' with past time 'when I was child', missing article 'a' before 'child', awkward and contradictory modal verbs ('would like, I will, I want'), wrong verb 'become a bike' instead of 'have' or 'own', and missing plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with past time (use past tense 'didn't have' and 'wanted'), remove filler words, use correct verbs ('have/own') and use plural or article for nouns ('a bike' or 'bikes'). Use concise sentences: 'When I was a child, I didn't have a bike. However, I wanted one because I like bikes.'

× In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country when in the past period because because many people don't have car, that's why, that's why.

✓ In my opinion, bikes were popular in my country in the past because many people didn't have cars.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker refers to the past but uses present tense 'are popular' and 'don't have'. Also repetition 'because because' and missing article/plural 'a car' or 'cars'. Suggestion: use past tense for both clauses ('were popular', 'didn't have') and correct noun plurality ('cars'). Remove repeated words and redundancy. Also keep a single clear reason clause: '...were popular because many people didn't have cars.'

× People almost have.

✓ Almost everyone had one.

Fragment and unclear subject: 'People almost have' is incomplete and mixes tense. It lacks object and proper adverb placement. Suggestion: specify what people had and use past tense to match previous sentence: 'Almost everyone had one' or 'Most people had bikes.'