自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases. Improve grammar (past tense) and word choice (e.g., 'financial situation' instead of 'family condition').

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one because my parents had limited income, so I usually walked or took public transport to school.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, also) properly and avoid repeating words. Use comparative forms correctly ('cheaper than other motor vehicles').

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient for short journeys and easy to park. For example, many people use them to commute to work or run errands, and they are cheaper to buy and maintain than cars.

× So that's why at that time, uh, I am not having a bike.

✓ So that's why at that time, I did not have a bike.

The sentence refers to a past situation ('at that time'), so the verb must be in the past tense. 'I am not having' is present continuous and incorrect here. Use simple past 'I did not have' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past states (I did not have).

× It was at that time, uh, my family condition, uh, my financially, my family condition was not so good.

✓ At that time, my family's financial condition was not very good.

The speaker used awkward and incorrect forms: 'my family condition' and 'my financially' are incorrect. Use the noun 'family's financial condition' or 'my family's finances'. Also 'not so good' is informal; 'not very good' is clearer. Suggestion: combine possessive 'family's' with the noun 'financial condition'.

× Yes, bikes are so popular in my country because uh bikes are so convenient uh to travel from one place to another.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient for traveling from one place to another.

The sentence repeats 'bikes' unnecessarily and uses informal 'so' twice. The pronoun 'they' should refer to 'bikes' (third person plural), which is correct, but the phrase 'to travel' is less natural than 'for traveling'. Use 'they are' and 'for traveling' for smoother, grammatical phrasing. Suggestion: replace repeated nouns with pronouns and use 'for traveling'.

× Also they are cheaper than the other motor vehicles also.

✓ They are also cheaper than other motor vehicles.

The phrase has redundant 'also' and incorrect article 'the other'. Use 'also' once, place it before the adjective or after the subject, and use 'other motor vehicles' (no 'the') for general comparison. Suggestion: 'They are also cheaper than other motor vehicles.'