自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct tense usage. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two short specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear clauses.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle in junior high school that my father bought for me when I achieved first place in my class. I was really proud because it felt like a reward for my hard work.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons using linking words and correct word forms. Use singular/plural and adjective forms correctly and avoid repeating the same phrase.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Indonesia. They are affordable and practical for short trips, and they are environmentally friendly because they produce no pollution, which makes them a common choice for many people.

× Yes, I did. I have a bicycle when I was in junior high school.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was in junior high school.

The sentence mixes past ('I did') with present tense 'have'. Use past simple 'had' to match the time reference 'when I was in junior high school.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent by using past simple for past situations.

× I got it from my father, which give me who give me a buys a new bicycle because I got a rank one in my class I'm really proud of.

✓ I got it from my father; he gave me a new bicycle because I got first rank in my class, which I am really proud of.

The original has confused relative clauses and incorrect verb forms. Replace the unclear 'which give me who give me a buys a new bicycle' with a clear independent clause 'he gave me a new bicycle.' Use past simple 'gave' to match time. Use 'first rank' instead of 'rank one' and separate clauses with punctuation for clarity. Maintain consistent tense and correct word order.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

This sentence is acceptable; no article error. 'Bikes' as a general plural noun is correct when asking about popularity.

× Absolutely yes. Until now bicycles are the most popular transportations in my country, Indonesia, because the because bicycles are affordable and also environmental and also less pollution.

✓ Absolutely. Until now, bicycles are the most popular means of transportation in my country, Indonesia, because they are affordable and environmentally friendly and cause less pollution.

Multiple issues: 'transportations' is incorrect plural form—use 'means of transportation' or 'transportation' (uncountable). 'Because the because' is repetitive; remove duplication. 'Bicycles are affordable and also environmental'—'environmental' is an adjective needing a noun; use 'environmentally friendly.' Use pronoun 'they' to refer to bicycles and keep present simple 'are' for general truth. Add commas for clarity.