自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Жауабыңызды нақтылап, грамматика мен сөз таңдауды түзегеніңіз жөн. Мысалы, «write» орнына «ride» деген дұрыс, және өткен шақ формаларын дұрыс қолдану қажет. Әрі сөйлемдерді қысқартып, байланыстыру үшін «because», «so», «because of that» сияқты сөздерді пайдаланыңыз. Мысалы: алаңдаушылық туындаса, қосымша бір ғана нақты деталь (кім үйретпеді, қай жаста) қосыңыз және 3–4 сөйлемнен аспауға тырысыңыз.

範例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I couldn't ride one. No one taught me to ride, and my parents were often busy with work, so I never learned. If I had learned earlier I would have enjoyed cycling more as a child.

建議: Жауабыңызды бір сөйлемде бастап, қосымша ұғымдарды байланыстырғаныңыз жөн. «In Kazakhstan.» сияқты бөлек тұрған фразаларды негізгі сөйлемге қосыңыз. Сондай-ақ нақты мысалдар немесе салыстырулар қосып, «however», «mainly», «mostly» сияқты байланыстырушы сөздерді қолданыңыз. Мысалы: қай қалаларда тұрасыз немесе ауа райы, инфрақұрылым әсер етеді деген сияқты нақты себептер көрсетіңіз.

範例: In my opinion, bicycles are not among the most popular forms of transport in Kazakhstan because cities often lack bike lanes and many people prefer cars. Mostly people use bikes for leisure or short rides in parks, but not for daily commuting.

× To be honest, I didn't have a bike in my childhood.

✓ To be honest, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Use 'when I was a child' instead of 'in my childhood' for natural past-time expression. The sentence is past tense and 'when I was a child' fits conversational English better.

× The main reason is I just couldn't ride it.

✓ The main reason was that I just couldn't ride one.

Maintain past tense consistency: change 'is' to 'was'. Also use 'ride one' to avoid repeating 'it' when no bike has been mentioned as a specific item; 'one' refers to a bike in general.

× I didn't know how to write it and no one taught me.

✓ I didn't know how to ride it and no one taught me.

The intended verb is 'ride', not 'write'. This is a word choice/spelling error. 'Ride' correctly describes using a bicycle.

× My parents always occupied with their works.

✓ My parents were always occupied with their work.

Use passive/adjective structure 'were occupied' for past continuous state and 'work' (uncountable) instead of plural 'works'. Also include 'were' for correct verb.

× In my opinion, bicycles are not one of the most popular transports in my country.

✓ In my opinion, bicycles are not among the most popular forms of transport in my country.

Use 'among' with 'the most popular' and 'forms of transport' (or 'types of transport') for natural collocation. 'Transports' as a plural noun is incorrect in this context.

× In Kazakhstan.

✓ In Kazakhstan,

This fragment should be attached to the previous sentence; use a comma instead of a period to make a single coherent sentence.

× They may be type of transport which people use in their leisure time, but that's it.

✓ They may be a type of transport that people use in their leisure time, but that's about it.

Use the article 'a' before 'type', use 'that' as the relative pronoun for things, and 'about it' is a natural idiom meaning 'that's all'. Also keep present simple for general truth.