自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Bạn cần điều chỉnh thì và ngữ pháp (ví dụ: ‘were’ → ‘was’, ‘can took’ → ‘could take’), rút gọn câu dài lặp ý và dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi đi, tần suất, cảm xúc) và giữ tối đa 5 câu. Cố gắng tránh ngập ngừng bằng cách chuẩn bị các cấu trúc đơn giản trước.

範例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike to school every day when I was a child. Riding made me feel relaxed and independent because I could choose my own route and leave on time. I especially enjoyed cycling in the cool morning air.

建議: Câu trả lời tương đối tự nhiên nhưng cần đa dạng từ vựng và thêm thông tin cụ thể để thuyết phục hơn (ví dụ lý do kinh tế, môi trường, hoặc so sánh với xe máy/ô tô). Dùng liên từ (because, so, therefore) để liên kết ý, tránh lặp từ như ‘in the street’. Giữ 3–4 câu rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. You can see many people cycling on the streets, especially in cities, because bikes are affordable and convenient. Many commuters use bikes to avoid traffic and save money on fuel.

× Yes I did. When I were a child I used to use the bike to go to the school.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child I used to use the bike to go to school.

'Were' is incorrect for first person singular in simple past; use 'was'. Also 'to the school' is unnecessary here; 'to school' is the natural collocation. Suggestion: Use 'was' with I for past descriptions and omit 'the' before 'school' when describing usual attendance.

× It's really beautiful when I go to when I went by bike I feel more ***** uh, more relaxed and can took myself to school.

✓ It was really nice when I went by bike; I felt more relaxed and could take myself to school.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Use past tense 'was' and 'felt' to match 'went'. 'Can took' is wrong: 'could take' is the correct past ability form ('could' + base verb). Also 'really beautiful' for experience should be 'really nice' or 'really enjoyable'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past for past events) and use 'could' + base verb for past ability.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× When you go down the streets, you can see many bikes in the street because people think bikes are really comfortable.

✓ When you go down the street, you can see many bikes in the streets because people think bikes are really convenient.

The original mixes 'streets' and 'the street' inconsistently. Use 'the street' or 'the streets' consistently. 'Comfortable' is better used for people; for bikes, 'convenient' or 'practical' is more natural. Suggestion: Maintain consistent noun number and choose adjectives appropriate to the noun.

× It's easy to ride, so they usually use it to get to work or to the school.

✓ They're easy to ride, so people usually use them to get to work or to school.

Pronouns must agree in number with 'bikes' (plural). Use 'they' or 'people' and 'them' for plural objects. Also 'to the school' should be 'to school' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun and drop 'the' before 'school' for general statements.