自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar. Avoid irrelevant phrases and incorrect word choices (e.g., “writing a bicycle,” “roller coaster” in this context). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child, and I still don't own one. I avoid cycling because I'm afraid of falling and I never learned to ride properly, so I prefer walking or taking public transport.

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear position, then give one or two specific supporting details or comparisons using linking words (e.g., “although,” “however”). Remove repeated phrases and filler words like “yeah.”

範例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular; I often see people cycling daily, especially for short trips. However, public transportation is used more widely for commuting because it is faster and more convenient in cities.

× Back to when I was a kid, I didn't used to have a bike and to be honest I still don't own one because I'm afraid I could hurt myself and I'm just not that good with writing a bicycle or going to the roller coaster. I don't know I.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't use to have a bike, and to be honest I still don't own one because I'm afraid I might hurt myself and I'm just not that good at riding a bicycle or going on roller coasters.

Multiple issues: 'didn't used to' is incorrect; the correct form is 'didn't use to' for past habitual negatives (Past tense issue). 'I'm afraid I could hurt myself' is better as 'I'm afraid I might hurt myself' to express possibility. 'Not that good with writing a bicycle' uses the wrong verb and preposition; correct is 'good at riding a bicycle' (Incorrect use of prepositions and verbs, but per instructions only correct types listed — primary correction framed as past tense issue and adjusted wording to be grammatical). Also 'going to the roller coaster' should be 'going on roller coasters'. Suggestions: use 'didn't use to' for past habits, use 'might' for potential negative outcomes, use 'good at + gerund' and 'ride/ride on roller coasters'.

× As far as I'm concerned, they pretty much are because I tend to come across people riding a bike on a daily basis. However, public transportation is more popular, I would say. However, I agree that it is common in our country. Yeah.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, they pretty much are because I often come across people riding bikes on a daily basis. However, I would say public transportation is more popular. Yes, it is common in our country.

Tense and phrasing improvements: 'I tend to come across' is acceptable, but 'I often come across' sounds more natural in present tense descriptions (Present tense issue). 'Riding a bike' can be pluralized to 'riding bikes' to match general reference (Singular and plural issue). Repetition of 'However' and sentence fragments were smoothed for clarity. Suggestions: prefer concise present-tense expressions for habits (use 'often' or 'usually'), match plurality when speaking generally, and avoid repeating conjunctions.