自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove filler words (umm, uh) and correct verb tenses and articles (e.g., “I had a bike”). Keep answer under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it, and I used to practice with him every weekend. Because we spent that time together, I remember the bike fondly — it was bright red and had a comfortable seat.

建議: Provide a direct opinion first, then support it with two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “roads” not “Rd.”) and combine similar ideas into one clear sentence to stay within five sentences.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. One reason is that our roads are often congested and lack dedicated bike lanes, so cycling can be unsafe. Also, high pollution levels and poor infrastructure discourage people from using bikes regularly.

× Yes, I have a buy I had a bike when I had when I was a child, umm, I always uh wanted to spend some quality time with my father and he uh taught me umm, how can, how uh, I can ride this bike and that bike was really beautiful.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I always wanted to spend quality time with my father, and he taught me how to ride it. That bike was really beautiful.

The student mixes present and past tenses and uses awkward phrasing. Use simple past for past situations (had, wanted, taught). Remove filler words and incorrect question-like structure 'how can, how uh, I can ride' and replace with the infinitive construction 'how to ride' or a finite clause 'how to ride it' or 'how I could ride it'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for childhood memories and simplify: 'I had a bike when I was a child. I always wanted to spend quality time with my father, and he taught me how to ride it.'

× Well, I'm not sure because, you know, uh, there are not a suitable Rd. for them to ride it.

✓ Well, I'm not sure because there are not suitable roads for them to ride on.

'There are not a suitable Rd.' is incorrect: 'suitable' must agree in number with 'roads' and 'Rd.' should be written 'roads'. Also verbs and prepositions: 'ride on' is idiomatic for riding bikes on roads. Suggestion: use plural 'roads' with 'suitable' and include the preposition 'on' if needed: 'there are not suitable roads for them to ride on.'

× Uh, you know, uh, people are, uh, not actually safe if they, uh, just ride a bike in our streets and our streets are really congested and polluted and I think it's not, uh, suitable.

✓ People are not actually safe if they just ride a bike on our streets. Our streets are really congested and polluted, so I don't think they are suitable for cycling.

Pronoun reference and sentence flow are unclear. Replace vague 'it' with a clear subject ('they' or 'our streets') and use consistent preposition 'on our streets.' Also split into two sentences for clarity and add a cause/result connector 'so' to show reason. Suggestion: use clear pronouns and link ideas: 'Our streets are really congested and polluted, so I don't think they are suitable for cycling.'