自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give 1–2 concise specific reasons. Avoid repeating words and incorrect pronouns (use “I” and “we” correctly). Use linking words (e.g., because, so) and correct articles and word order.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family didn’t have much money. For example, my parents prioritized essentials like food and school expenses, so buying a bike wasn’t possible.

建議: Make the answer coherent and accurate. Begin with a clear opinion, then give 2 specific reasons linked with connectors (because, so, for example). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “cars and trains” not “bags”) and correct grammar/word order. Be concise and avoid unrelated words.

範例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Uzbekistan because most people prefer cars and trains for speed and convenience. Also, the climate is often hot, which makes cycling uncomfortable, so many people choose motorized transport.

× No, I had no bike when you were a child because my family is poor and and.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my family was poor.

The original mixes tenses and uses second person 'you' incorrectly. Use past simple 'did not have' for negation, and match subject 'I' with 'I was a child.' Also remove repeated 'and' and change present 'is poor' to past 'was poor' to keep consistent past time frame.

× And my family has no a lot of money.

✓ And my family did not have a lot of money.

The phrase 'has no a lot of money' is ungrammatical. In past context use 'did not have' plus 'a lot of money.' Do not place 'no' before 'a lot of'; use 'not' with the verb for negation.

× My father is very good a lot of times.

✓ My father was very kind most of the time.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Very good a lot of times' mixes adjective/adverb and frequency incorrectly. Use 'was very kind' (past tense to match context) and 'most of the time' to express frequency.

× I don't think so.

✓ I don't think so.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense when expressing belief now, so no change is needed.

× Bags are popular in my country.

✓ Bicycles are not very popular in my country.

The student likely meant 'bikes' or 'bicycles' but wrote 'bags.' Also this reply should address popularity negatively to match previous sentence 'I don't think so.' Use 'bicycles' for clarity and correct meaning.

× My country is popular transportation, car and train because faster than bikes and weather is very hot in Uzbekistan.

✓ People in my country prefer cars and trains for transportation because they are faster than bikes, and the weather in Uzbekistan is very hot.

Original sentence has word order, article and structure errors. Rephrase to 'People in my country prefer cars and trains for transportation' and use 'they are faster than bikes' to compare correctly. Add 'the' before 'weather in Uzbekistan' if desired; here 'the weather in Uzbekistan is very hot' is clearer. This fixes subject-verb agreement and comparison structure.